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I Should Have Been

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jwesley
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0 posted 06-25-2017 01:41 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jwesley

I Should Have


I died
and went to heaven,
and was so shocked
I begged to be dropped
below
but they wouldn't do it,
said I deserved more
than that;
but I left you to die,
at home, alone,
while I went to the store
for a few bottles
of beer.
I left you to die,
alone,
and hell is where
I belong,
with the others
of my kind.

I don't care
how long ago it was,
I don't care
that you were dead
long before I left,
I don't care
if you were in an
unresponsive state of life,
if machines kept you alive,
if your mind was in
some other-where,
if . . . if . . .
I just don't care.

I wasn't there when you died,
and I should have been.
.
.
.


wesley james beard, jr.

Hope this comes across more as a "love" piece, rather than a "sadness" piece, but as long as it works somewhere, I'll take it.

j.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (06-25-2017 08:23 PM).]

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 06-25-2017 02:35 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

It is touching for sure Jimmy. You took on a perspective not commonly thought of. The love is clearly there but there is no overlooking the sadness. ~L
JerryPat2
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2 posted 06-25-2017 02:44 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Nice poetry . . . Can sink your teeth into it.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
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since 03-12-2008
Posts 6200
by the sea


3 posted 06-25-2017 05:25 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

some regrets can haunt us, there is "something" deeply poignant in your words
yann
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Hello Jimmy ~ A touching piece my friend...Feels like love and some regret & sadness mixed in ~ Enjoyed reading ~ Alana
 
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