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sticks,stones,and the futility of fingers

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novemberblue
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one catastrophic line
wound around my throat
the razor wire brambles ran
like ivy on dead porches

strangling the boards and bones
creeping shards of sundering cold
frayed every quaking nerve
from the sanctity of skin

you left me here in ribbons

left me here

and this profane bouquet
withering on the floor

all of the thorns purged
that I would rather bleed to death against
than a thousand maudlin words
perfumed with gasoline

concussed and warring I shook
for necessary surgery
the lungs locked and pushed aside
if you had reached in

with violent nails and wrenched
the ribs from beneath my breast
and lighted candles in the walls
to glance this gasping heart

I think I could have then with you
wearing me on your hands
but you were only so
very sorry
~H

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

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1 posted 06-07-2017 06:25 PM       View Profile for Poet In Pink   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet In Pink

Hello Heather pleased to meet you The imagery stark darkness ~ The raw pain so evident ~ You pen it well ~ Look forward to reading more from you ~ Alana
novemberblue
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2 posted 06-07-2017 06:32 PM       View Profile for novemberblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for novemberblue

Thank you so much, Alana! Looking forward to future glances

Heather

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

jwesley
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3 posted 06-07-2017 09:39 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

I like the overall feel of   this, my friend, but after several reads I will just leave it at that because I can't put my finger on why.

Did enjoy the reads, though...

j.
novemberblue
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4 posted 06-07-2017 10:17 PM       View Profile for novemberblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for novemberblue

Well, I do appreciate your time . I'm trying to get familiar with the blue pages here again. It's changed a bit with so many gone. Nice to meet you new once more.

Heather

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

jwesley
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5 posted 06-07-2017 10:34 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Oops! Seems I left off in mid-sentence in my previous comment... so here it is completed:

I like the overall feel of   this, my friend, but after several reads I will just leave it at that because I can't put my finger on why I can't quite get deeper into it than that.


again, enjoyed

j.

By the way I've been around since about 2000 and seem to remember a name of "Heather" but not novemberblue --- did you use a different handle??
novemberblue
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6 posted 06-07-2017 11:37 PM       View Profile for novemberblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for novemberblue

I'm glad you enjoyed it some! I'm floating around in the archives somewhere as unboundpoetess, lol. I joined in 08 and haven't posted in a looong time. For some reason, I wasn't able to reclaim my old username...? So anyway, here I am, reinvented. Lots of dear friends missing here.
H

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

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7 posted 06-08-2017 09:33 AM       View Profile for Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

This is really good. I am coming back to read it agsin in a bit. I like it.

Alison
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Welcome to Passions! This was a great first entry, and we look forward to more. Please check your email for a very special greeting!
novemberblue
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9 posted 06-08-2017 06:45 PM       View Profile for novemberblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for novemberblue

Thank you Alison for the hope of a second glance!

I appreciate the welcome, Sunshine

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

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10 posted 06-08-2017 10:09 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

thanks heather for the darkness here that you manage with poetry, this sounds deep and is beautifully expressed, will read it again


yann
 
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