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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 05-25-2017 11:15 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden


If only I could exchange
my daytime drowsy
for my bedtime brain bedlam.
Each one
in its own time
possesses me.
I fight to stay awake
in the daylight.
At night I battle
to slow my thoughts
to sleep.
I try to think about
the seductive nature
of sleepiness,
the way it melts
my body into lead
and seals my eyes shut.
Everything is warm
and comfortable,
until my head bobs,
jerking my eyes open.
The soft silkiness
of sleepy soon returns
to claim my consciousness.
I am not at work
and so I surrender up
my snore.
Iím staying up late tonight
to see if I can catch up
with oleí sleepy
and have him hook me up
with some hardcore drowsy.
I donít feel like fighting
myself tonight.


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BluesSerenade
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1 posted 05-25-2017 11:26 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

You have such a wonderful way with words, Lori.
P.U Stinkenbaum
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2 posted 05-25-2017 11:52 PM       View Profile for P.U Stinkenbaum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for P.U Stinkenbaum

quote:
"I fight to stay awake
in the daylight.
At night I battle
to slow my thoughts
to sleep"
Unless you are seriously 'vested' in your daytime job Lori Rhoden, it seems the remedy for your situation is to work a job that has a night shift.

...or not.

Just out looking for the real me...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 05-26-2017 06:53 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

Hi Blues! Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked my way with words. Seems like my topics are pretty much all the same though-me whining about something.~L
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 05-26-2017 07:03 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

PU,
I don't have to wear a "vest" at work, but if I did it would be 15 years old with summers off. I'm not giving up my day job.
Went to bed at 10:45 instead of 8:45 and got up at 6:30 instead of 4:30. I like those hours better I think. We'll see. It was daylight when I get up so I missed my coffee in the dark. The main thing was I didn't lay there awake and tormented last night. ~L
Poet In Pink
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MI


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Hi Lori Sorry to hear about your sleeping dilemma ~ I just hate it when I get my days and nights mixed up ~ Hope you can get your schedule on track ~ Alana
P.U Stinkenbaum
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6 posted 05-27-2017 04:31 AM       View Profile for P.U Stinkenbaum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for P.U Stinkenbaum

quote:
"Went to bed at 10:45 instead of 8:45 and got up at 6:30 instead of 4:30
Yes Lori Rhoden, if you didn't feel "healthy, wealthy and wise" at the earlier time, settling for healthy and wise are the better of the three.

Ah! Sweet slumbers. Want coffee in the dark? Get a sleep shade and leave it on.

Just out looking for the real me...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 05-27-2017 06:15 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

PU thanks for your thoughtful reply. One time I dreamed I was wealthy. I dreamed I fell into a vat at the Pizza factory and was rolling in dough. ~L
Alison
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8 posted 05-27-2017 10:30 AM       View Profile for Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I so agree with Bluesy. You do have a wonderful way with words. Your titles are among the best on PiP. They often intrigue me. Also, you nailed this sleep pattern issue. Nailed it!

A
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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9 posted 05-27-2017 10:49 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

Hey Alison!
Thank you so much for your kind words. Especially about the titles. Some people complain titles are hard, but I find them fun and easy (because I'm usually ripping off one of the lines in my poem). I like that you say I have a way with words, I know what you mean and you are not saying I'm good at herding them all into sonnets. ~L
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10 posted 05-27-2017 01:19 PM       View Profile for Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I think that's one of the things that I love about your poetry -- your free-range words.
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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11 posted 05-27-2017 04:04 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

That's what I like to think is my thing. Thanks for noticing! Hugs! ~L
 
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