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Still...Amongst The Dead

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Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror


0 posted 05-18-2017 08:10 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Imprisoned as a captive thought
dreams lay in my hopes for tomorrow
Morning's fragrance so sweet and clean,
remain moist with tears of sorrow

Should in passing would we meet,
inclining to be gracious,
much more each one of us could see
how strong our love had made us

Without your touching gift for word,
my pen lays uninspired
Ghostly figures impressed in pulp,
tell sadly of spent desires

Like scattered leaves in tortured breezes,
so my poetry has fled
All my memories once so vibrant,
lay still now amongst the dead

...just bein' Bluesy

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 05-18-2017 10:00 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

ooooh! That was absolutely haunting...Like a tune stuck in your head...the emotion it evokes...you plunge a knife...then twist it.
the pain is perfect. ~L
2islander2
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2 posted 05-18-2017 10:09 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

wonderful reading, you dare something rare about losses, and life which goes on, until .couldn't we call that despair ? thanks for the poignant poem


yann
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3 posted 05-18-2017 11:06 PM       View Profile for Poet In Pink   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet In Pink

Sad but beautifully brushed emotions. It surely touches deeply ~ Much enjoyed ~ Alana
Bluesy Socrateaser
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4 posted 05-19-2017 12:10 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thank you Miss Lori. I like the way you see my poem. Animated and colorful reply. Thanks again!


BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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5 posted 05-19-2017 12:12 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Your reply tells me you know something of these feelings I express in my poem. Thank you yann for looking deeper.

BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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6 posted 05-19-2017 12:20 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thanks Miss Alana. I appreciate your reply.

...just bein' Bluesy

jwesley
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7 posted 05-19-2017 06:53 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Such dreams, in my experience, have a way of returning, my friend . . . New Seasons and Old Seasons - my dreams tend to be both.


j.
Bluesy Socrateaser
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8 posted 05-19-2017 07:45 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thanks j for your comments and the benefit of your dream experiences. Much obliged.

The reality is that it was only a movie.

...just bein' Bluesy

Paul Wilson
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9 posted 05-19-2017 10:29 PM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Bluesy... Wonderful read. Really like your style...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

P.U Stinkenbaum
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Good read Bluesy. A lamentation of loss that sears the heart.
Bluesy Socrateaser
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11 posted 05-20-2017 04:39 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thanks for coming by and commenting Paul. Good to see you visiting again.

BTS


...just bein' Bluesy
JamesMichael
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12 posted 05-23-2017 09:00 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice flow...james
suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


13 posted 05-24-2017 12:58 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This one goes straight to my heart - especially the last verse.

I've said many times that I can't write happy - those voices in my head stay silent when the heart is singing. But pain can go deep enough that there aren't any words to do it justice... and death certainly inflicts that pain.

Beautiful, thought-provoking write!
Bluesy Socrateaser
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14 posted 05-24-2017 02:14 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thank you Ruth. I know it's tough after Toe's passing as it also is for dear Margherita, Michael, Seymour, Karen and others. May they all rest well.

Regards from Bluesy

...just bein' Bluesy

 
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