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Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!


0 posted 05-12-2017 06:34 PM       View Profile for Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alison

there are no poems
or words to rhyme

the broken pieces of songs
i sing trail into the night
and clutch my motherís hand

i wish for more time while
she whispers an apology
for taking too long

there is no schedule
go when you are ready
iíll be okay, i say

she drifts into restless sleep
and i make no noise as i cry


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1 posted 05-12-2017 08:11 PM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Poignant and beautiful tribute to your mother,
Alison.
JerryPat2
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2 posted 05-12-2017 08:15 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Oh my, what a sad, but wonderful conservation. I absolutely love it.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JamesMichael
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3 posted 05-12-2017 08:43 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

beautifully expressed grief...james
jwesley
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4 posted 05-13-2017 06:58 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Added this to my favorites of yours, my friend. Beautiful write - felt it throughout.


j.
2islander2
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5 posted 05-14-2017 08:17 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

sincerily poignant, Alison, penetrating feelings in this poem,

yann
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on the threshold of a dream


6 posted 05-15-2017 08:24 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I've picked up the phone to call you many times this past week, but - as with so many other things - never completed the action.

I wish I could make things better/easier... but I can only tell you I know... and that you have found words for those feelings so overwhelming that words fail.

HUGS to you, sweet lady.
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7 posted 05-15-2017 03:13 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Oh Alison, even in your sorrow you write so beautifully.  I felt your words deeply  I am so sorry for your pain.  Bless you sweet one.
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8 posted 05-15-2017 05:35 PM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Tears, dear Alison, I am so sorry for your grief and pain and emptiness and anguished thoughts - but I am also envious of the bond between you and your mother.  Hugs.
Alison
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9 posted 05-16-2017 12:21 PM       View Profile for Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Oh my. You all touched me deeper than deep. I wrote this after my mom died a few years ago. Around the same time, I stopped posting. I found this in my computer the other day. I miss my mother, but I am happy and doing well.

xoxo
Alison
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I cannot tell you how this pulled at my heartstrings.  My mother is 94 and has been confined to a bed for about three years. Your beautifully written poem is written perfectly, expressing difficult times.

To the library.
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11 posted 05-17-2017 05:21 PM       View Profile for soul drifter   Email soul drifter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for soul drifter

Thank you for this. Since my mother died almost 6 years ago I've kept up writing, but I haven't been able to put my grief for losing her into words. I couldn't put them together in a way that worked or anything. You have done what I wish I could. Exceptional writing. I'm so sorry for your loss. I am glad you are still here, sharing your work with us.
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12 posted 05-18-2017 03:07 PM       View Profile for Poet In Pink   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet In Pink

Pleased to meet you Alison This tugs at my heartstrings as I read. I lost my own dear Mother 7 years ago, so I relate with your feelings of sorrow. Much enjoyed my read ~ God Bless
Alison
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Thank you all.  Your responses were heart-written and heart-felt.

Alison
 
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