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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2017-04-19 04:19 PM


Sweet release,
the midnight hour,
clandestine thoughts,
you will devour.
Take what you can,
remember the past,
passionate delight,
on her divan.
Those bloodless lips,
engulf your own.
Beauty close at hand,
can sink tall ships,
so pillow talk,
whispers in the dark.
A beauty like no other,
vicious as a starved hawk.

Heavy boots, middle of the night,
Your hiding place they shine a light.
Sent to a camp, wither and die,
These are really very bad guys.

©January 14, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton


~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

© Copyright 2017 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
P.U Stinkenbaum
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1 posted 2017-04-19 08:16 PM


The year and the story are well remembered indeed Mr. Bolton, but these lines of yours fared the better:
quote:
"Take what you can,
remember the past,
passionate delight,
on her divan"
Great piece!

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...

JerryPat2
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Posts 16975
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2 posted 2017-04-19 08:22 PM


Many thanks, PU . . . I appreciate your kind words.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2017-04-20 06:20 AM


1984 the Novel written by George Orwell?  yes, it seems they were very bad guys....

Great write...and now I can see how that 2nd paragraph ties in with the first, as your viewing love from the eyes of the author...for the heroine of the story.

Awesome write.  Thank you

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2017-04-20 08:04 AM


Thank you Lee, for your gracious remarks.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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