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P.U Stinkenbaum
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0 posted 2017-04-18 03:14 AM


Solid as steel
Cylindrical in shape
Manic in mannerisms

     Insatiable desire for you

Distortions, first one...
Then a thousand
You "how do you do" me

     Then stab me as I smile

Feeling the blunt resistance
Knowing you'll part for me
Lines across my back gleam

     A sweet scarlett

Left to die in-between bedposts
Robbing me and leaving me blind
You weren't one for amenities

     I was meant for you      

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2017-04-18 10:59 AM


Hard to figure this one out. On the one hand there are positive points to the poem and  then there are negative lines.

Eh . . . Sorta like a real life romance.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

P.U Stinkenbaum
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2 posted 2017-04-18 01:28 PM


Thanks for reading and commenting Mr. Bolton.

If I've mastered any one thing in this life my friend, it's ambiguity.  

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2017-04-18 10:00 PM


fine writing...james
P.U Stinkenbaum
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4 posted 2017-04-18 11:10 PM


Thank you James for your kind reply.

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...

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