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2islander2
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0 posted 2017-03-03 08:42 PM



The indifference creates other rivers,
Sensitive rivers,
We cross them alone, indifferent,
We meet Indians, bivouacs,
We make of the traffic of alcohol, with weak spirits,
To transport barrels,
We hunt bisons in our past dreams,
Point. The ramblings return us to the grass.

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2017-03-03 09:42 PM


Nothing like having a pleasant daydream is there, Yann?

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (03-03-2017 11:14 PM).]

2islander2
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2 posted 2017-03-04 08:55 AM


not only jerry, it is more deep than that , thanks for reading
yann

jjote
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3 posted 2017-03-05 07:54 PM


I like the last line.."point..." , and I feel there's something deep in what you want to say..keeps my mind thinking not only dreaming
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4 posted 2017-06-07 03:09 PM


Indifference. It causes civilizations to fall. That and its partner, complacency.

Alison

2islander2
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5 posted 2017-06-08 10:15 PM


thanks jjote for the precious accurate comment, it sounds perfect to me


yann

2islander2
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6 posted 2017-06-08 10:17 PM


this is so true Alison, the two which you named made u s feeling apart, indifference and complaisance, loved your rich comment
yann

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