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Namyh
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0 posted 02-12-2017 03:21 PM       View Profile for Namyh   Email Namyh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Namyh

The Warrior Mice

The orange and gold of the dark desert floor
did fade with the plummet of the Sun
-and the red heat ebbed in the twilight
-while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight.
-When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight,
two mice did run, run, run

thru a deep, deep gully of an upslant hill
over sand in the night sublime.
-Their hearts beat faster in the lost light
-from impending disaster of a fright night
-by the claws of an Owl now in mid-flight
as its wings sliced the air from behind.

But as Warrior Mice hunting on the hot desert sand
and designed for evasive speeds,
-they flickered thru shadows of the night time,
-criss-crossed the black road’s white line,
-confused the Owl’s sight line
bringing food for their young ‘uns needs.

And the orange and gold of the bright desert floor
were the paints of the dawn’s display
-as the mice peeked once at the daylight
-thru the sweltering heat that was airtight
-while the sand grew hot in the sunlight
and the Owl waited close of the day.

Soon, sunset light poured colors into night
dimming day into indigo and black;
-on the sounds and the silences of evening,
-on the shadows of the forest life teeming
-where the Dusk of the night stays sleeping
with a dream of the Dawn coming back.

Then the orange and gold of the dark desert floor
disappeared with the plummet of the Sun
-and the red heat ebbed in the twilight
-while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight.
-When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight
two mice did run, run, run.

Namyh


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Bluesy Socrateaser
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1 posted 02-13-2017 02:02 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Cute story Namyh. You have to function well in your environment if you're going to cut it. Your "Warrior Mice" are pretty 'street-smart' for a couple of desert 'rats'.

Really liked these lines:
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Soon, sunset light poured colors into night dimming day into indigo and black

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Then the orange and gold of the dark desert floor disappeared with the plummet of the Sun



BTS


...just bein' Bluesy
jjote
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2 posted 02-13-2017 06:45 PM       View Profile for jjote   Email jjote   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jjote

I'm not familiar with this unique style, Namyh, but regardless, the consistency of the 3rd, 4th, 5th lines form, creates an appeal for me, like the refrain of a song or a serenade in the night. Enjoyed.
Namyh
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3 posted 02-14-2017 03:20 PM       View Profile for Namyh   Email Namyh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Namyh

BluesyS - To function well where you are, always bring your 'street smarts' and your 'gut sense' with you and then you may just survive in the desert. It'll make a Warrior out of you every time. Thanks for really liking those phrases and for stopping in to enjoy BluesyS. Namyh
Namyh
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4 posted 02-14-2017 03:29 PM       View Profile for Namyh   Email Namyh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Namyh

Jjote - I got stuck in several places when writing this. I could have sworn I heard a voice say "Use the Force Namyh. Use the Force" which I did. This created work was the resulting song and serenade. Hope it put a smile on ya. Namyh
 
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