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2islander2
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by the sea

0 posted 2017-02-12 05:33 AM



Without these elegant princesses,
Without my sisters of the sky,
Without these laces in the fine ears,
Without these oranges in the long neck,
Without these stars in my heart,
Without you my sweet sisters,
Without you my strange giraffes,
do not call me anymore "earth"

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2017-02-12 09:44 AM


Sorry Yann, but didn't understand it.

Understand it is about the stars in he sky, but "Strange giraffes, laces in the fine ears, oranges in the long neck, I just do not “get.”

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
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2 posted 2017-02-12 10:53 AM


thanks Jerry, there is no trouble here, no obligation to get something, the lace was supposed to describe the lightness, the delicateness, orange is the color of giraffes, i feel the translation from french didn't get the point, you don't have to feel sorry at all, you are very welcome for reading


yann

Bluesy Socrateaser
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3 posted 2017-02-13 02:11 AM


My sister looked more like a giraffe when she laid on her back than when she stood up. Mom was just the opposite.

Thanks yann, for reminding me of that.


BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

jjote
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4 posted 2017-02-16 10:04 AM


Okay, I've lived a lot of years. in Canada, but Sadly I don't know French..so what's priere?

I am feeling like you're writing about the fruits of the earth, that without them earth will not be earth?


2islander2
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5 posted 2017-02-16 10:27 AM


thanks bluesy, you made me smiling. and appreciate your sister too,


have a good day
yann

2islander2
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6 posted 2017-02-16 10:32 AM


hi JJote, i guess we can call giraffes a fruits of the earth, this si a great image, concerning the prière , this is a prayer, i can guess you were not living in quebec, thanks for all the comments
yann

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