In The Arm And In My Head, {'She's' There}

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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2017-02-01 02:51 PM

She attracts me...
when she's gone
I'm empty inside

Every sound reverberates
as in an empty room,
conscious of myself only

But then, not long after
they begin to taunt me
the little ones that know me

...and my weaknesses

Twisting and distorting me
from the inside out
until I scream out for release,
prostrating myself before them

...loosen the cinch

Climb back into the chair,
light a cigarette...

Look out the window,
follow the sun
to the hardwood floor.

Then take another drag
smoke fills the beam of light
that skewers the glass panes,
like the way she pierces my soul

she attracts me...
and I am helpless to resist her

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2017-02-01 03:06 PM

Oh my, yes, yes indeed, I have so been there where your poems' words resides upon this page. There is nothing to be done about it except to await her return for however many hours, or days, she cares to remain with you. Yes!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2017-02-01 05:00 PM

nice writing...james

jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2017-02-02 08:39 AM

There's a lot of sadness here, still I can feel a glimmer of hope for her return..and that day will come, don't give up.

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

4 posted 2017-02-03 02:30 AM

Thanks for looking into it as you did JerryPat. I appreciate it.

BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

5 posted 2017-02-03 02:30 AM

Thanks James.

BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

6 posted 2017-02-03 02:31 AM

Thanks Josefina. I appreciate your comments.

...just bein' Bluesy

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2017-02-04 04:38 PM

this is quite sad, Bluesy , emptiness is a bad companion, when someone leaves, this poem is full of tears as i can feel, don't let emotion emerge you too much
except for such penning

have a good day
yann

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2017-02-05 12:55 PM

Love the last line especially !

j.

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

9 posted 2017-02-05 03:08 PM

Thank you yann for your comments and sincerity.

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

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In The Mirror

10 posted 2017-02-05 03:09 PM

I appreciate your visit j. Thanks a lot!

...just bein' Bluesy

[This message has been edited by Bluesy Socrateaser (02-05-2017 09:24 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

11 posted 2017-02-05 10:15 PM

Yesss! That was amazing! A sensual murmur that was, just stepped out of the shower, fresh. Helpless is sweet agony... Excellent write. ~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

12 posted 2017-02-05 11:19 PM

Thanks for your exuberant reply Lori. Here, use my beach towel...it'll keep the prying eyes at bay.

BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

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