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JerryPat2
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0 posted 01-27-2017 07:54 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

even the walls were sensuous
paintings of ancient gothic masters
strategically placed
and very easy on the eye
we stayed there
in her bedroom all day
our hands
stroking forbidden places
made love
slept and awoke only to eat a bite
we changed the linen
resumed stroking
making love
taking small naps
I felt like I never wanted to leave
wanted to stay there
forever
until we were old with age
to be discovered
thousands of years from this moment
by men
who marveled
at our entwined skeletons

©January 27, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton


~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~
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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 11-07-2002
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In The Mirror


1 posted 01-28-2017 02:56 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

From the beginning to the end. Love...and the desire each has for the other, evident with every stroke of the digger's brush. Fascinating poetry JerryPat. Warms the heart.

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 01-28-2017 07:30 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

Well I know all the guys just really love it when you write about sex as if it is the alpha and omega of love. It is not. It is the icing on the cake, the grease on the wheels and mortar between the bricks. Great sex can happen between strangers and it is called lust not love.
Love is the day to day intentional tenderness
of your actions and words. Love is respect in the face of another's weaknesses and failings. Love is trust and commitment. Love is being together without sex if necessary.
I'm not saying your poem is bad, because it is not. It was meant to titillate and it did.
It may have great articles, but Playboy has never been called love literature. ~L
JerryPat2
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3 posted 01-28-2017 08:22 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Much obliged, Bluesy, thank you for stopping by and commenting.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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4 posted 01-28-2017 08:25 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Damn Lori, I understand what you have said. In my mind when I wrote this poem, that these two people "were" deeply in love. Most people who are deeply in love have sex. Sorry you took it the wrong way.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 01-28-2017 08:39 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

There in lies my point....The assumption that people deeply in love have marathon sex.
Or that somehow the amount of sex you have is the measurement of your love. That is a fantasy driven myth.  ~L
JerryPat2
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6 posted 01-28-2017 08:54 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

I don't understand why you are on my case, Lori, but I guess you have your reasons. I will say, however, that when two people are in love and if that love is fresh and intense they do, many times, have marathon sex.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jjote
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7 posted 01-28-2017 01:21 PM       View Profile for jjote   Email jjote   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jjote

wishful thinking Jerry, in the meantime, the stench of flesh will draw in the flies, or the coyotes, nothing will be left even the bones not even in a thousand days.

Just kidding, not to take away illusions
JerryPat2
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8 posted 01-28-2017 01:29 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

I suppose you are realistically correct, jjote, even so, this was a poem and I took poetical liberties.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~
Bluesy Socrateaser
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9 posted 01-28-2017 06:58 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

I just have to chime in here again JerryPat. I thought your poetry was very easy to understand. To take umbrage with it is beyond my experience, but not my understanding.

To suddenly see something in your poetry and then relate it to "Playboy" and "marathon sex" is sheer absurdity. You only mentioned 'marathon sex' in your reply and if some see two skeletons embracing since they were flesh and it reminds them of "Playboy", I'd question their reading material. You were taken for a ride so far out of context that it seems clear that the drivers are living a sexless life and are reacting, as you said, out of their own reasoning. I would add frustration, but then "National Geographic" gets my motor running and I'd be far more likely to find two skeletons in 'various positions' in it than any one issue of 'Playboy'.  

I've seen photos of the imagery you mention in your poem and was touched by what I saw.

http://rarehistoricalphotos.com/2800-year-old-kiss/  

Always good poetry from you JP.

BTS


...just bein' Bluesy
JerryPat2
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10 posted 01-28-2017 07:05 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Ah Blusey, thank you for "chiming in." Yes, I felt much the same about what some said. Eh, that is them and I am I. I still like my poem and am greatly pleased that you do also. Thank you again.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


11 posted 01-29-2017 12:48 AM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Stroke away
tracie66
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Australia


12 posted 01-29-2017 04:28 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Oh wow, loved the sensual intrigued of this visual write JerryPat

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        — W. E. Channing

JerryPat2
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13 posted 01-29-2017 08:20 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Doing the best I can, Bluesy. Thank you.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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14 posted 01-29-2017 08:21 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

So happy you liked my poem, Tracie. I appreciate your read and comments.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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