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Open Poetry #50

distress signal

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2017-01-21 11:45 PM

Hello, hello, planet Earth
Planet LOVE does not answer any more,
Where did I land?
My spaceship breaks down,
The radio is broken
Would I see again the earth?
Am short of kisses,
Hello, hello, Planet Earth,
I am lost
As a musical note in the space.

Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane

1 posted 2017-01-22 02:06 AM

I wasn't sure if I should dig for metaphors or break out my telescope. Very clever poetry yann. I'm glad I stopped to give it a read.

I wish you well on you're 'journey'.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2017-01-22 09:59 AM

"Musical note," eh, Yawn . . . Go ahead and ring dem bells!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2017-01-22 12:41 PM

thanks a lot Ari, this is elegantly turned , space has a real impact on modern poets, loved reading you

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2017-01-22 12:43 PM

hi herry, poetry is music for sure even lost in space

have a good day

yann

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

5 posted 2017-01-22 06:03 PM

Yann, I hope I'm not too far out of line when I tell you your poem gave me a hearty laugh. I just thought it was very funny.

...just bein' Bluesy

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2017-01-22 08:56 PM

hi bluesy, i can't tell you about that, really, the poem is deep, i thought to the song of david bowie, all i can say, it is a casual piece of poetry,

have a good day

yann

jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2017-01-25 11:38 PM

I was caught up trying to follow some mystical note in space. That's how this poem tickled my fancy.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2017-01-26 08:54 PM

thanks jjote, for the musical note too
yann

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