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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2017-01-12 09:58 AM


The sun shining on high,
swamp grass tall as your thigh.
Cypress knees slime with moss,
listen, listen, what the cost?

Leave me be, go away,
If you pray, you're prey.


High noon, a stillness here,
frowning, there is no cheer.
Stagnant bayou called Blue,
at last it’s paid it's dues.

If you stay, you will die,
So sorry, say goodbye.


It's not the midnight hour,
or nighttime's death so sour.
It's the truth of daytime,
lighting up all your crimes.

Your sins of black midnight,
now have you so contrite.


If you rush, you can leave,
and postpone 'til winters' eve.
If you go, and you must,
unto yourself please trust.

Another chance is yours,
so that you may be cured.


Take stock of life gone by,
smile, look it in the eye.
Be honest with the world,
No matter what it hurls.

Quixotic, this is not,
Just your life's lasting plot.


Find your id, give it room,
do not wear a costume.
Oh, do not waste this chance,
your soiled soul to enhance.

Remember what you've done,
those burnt bridges you shun.


Isn't life wonderful,
devoid of all the bull?
Aren't you glad you are you,
and your soul is renewed?

Think of this as a dream,
To bolster your esteem.


©December 19, 2016 - Jerry Pat Bolton

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

© Copyright 2017 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15
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Lancashire England
1 posted 2017-01-12 10:10 AM


Paying your dues can be somewhat expensive me thinks.
Best wishes for the New Year
Michael

Boomer Styles
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since 2014-03-02
Posts 194
South Side Of Success
2 posted 2017-01-13 01:03 AM


I really like this style! The commentary remains relevant to the verse from top to bottom! Great piece!

One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
3 posted 2017-01-13 11:10 AM


Hello Jerry, i loved the positive message and the melody work of this poem, thanks


yann

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2017-01-13 11:23 AM


No doubt about it, MICHELMAS, paying it up can be expensive and heartbreaking, but it  has to happen at some point in your life, methinks.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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5 posted 2017-01-13 11:24 AM


Thank you very much, Boomer, for your expertise concerning my style.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2017-01-13 11:26 AM


Ahhh . . . yann . . . Yes, I am not always as positive as I should be, and thank you for commenting on it. It is appreciated.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Ari Squire
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In The Phallus Lane
7 posted 2017-01-13 02:01 PM


I agree with everyone Jerry. A comprehensive stroke of your poetic pen never fails to impress and relate. Here's just one of all my favorite lines:
quote:
"Take stock of life gone by,
smile, look it in the eye.
Be honest with the world,
No matter what it hurls.

Quixotic, this is not,
Just your life's lasting plot
...and yes, our dues must be paid, but when is enough, enough? When do we get on to the good stuff?  


Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2017-01-13 02:16 PM


Ah, I have lived through a lot, as most of us have, and now in these very declining years, Ari, I really believe I have come to the "good stuff." I am at peace with myself and everybody I know and I am, as of this day, a happy man. I hope you find that peace and happiness much quicker than I did.

Thanks for being here today!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
9 posted 2017-01-15 08:03 AM


It is good you are coming to terms and making peace with things so you can lighten your load in your golden years. Be proud of yourself my friend. ~L
JerryPat2
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10 posted 2017-01-15 08:16 AM


Thank you Lori, actually I do think good of myself. Good luck on that ice storm.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
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In The Mirror
11 posted 2017-01-16 12:20 PM


"Remember what you've done, those burnt bridges you shun".

Yep! If you're going to burn bridges, make no plans to return unless you're a good swimmer. Great poetry Sir!


BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

incwrite
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since 2010-12-31
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new york
12 posted 2017-03-15 01:10 PM


I feel this one..nicely written
JerryPat2
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13 posted 2017-03-15 01:16 PM


Yeah you're right Bluesy . . . Thank you.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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14 posted 2017-03-15 01:17 PM


I so appreciate your thoughts and words, incwrite.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

P.U Stinkenbaum
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No Fan Of Exhaust Fans
15 posted 2017-03-16 02:40 AM


I thought this was a very long poem but instead I found a very inspiring life JerryPat2. Sharp and incisive!

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...please!

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
16 posted 2017-03-16 05:59 PM


Wow, a lot to ponder in this write, JP.
You always have a way of enticing heavy thought, line after line.  I had to read this several times.  Enjoyed.

JL


Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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17 posted 2017-03-16 06:03 PM


Thank you, P.U, for your very nice comments. I am so happy this was not just a long poem for you.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana
18 posted 2017-03-16 06:05 PM


Hi JL, and thank you so much for such deep feelings within your comments.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

P.U Stinkenbaum
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Posts 388
No Fan Of Exhaust Fans
19 posted 2017-03-20 02:53 AM


quote:
"It's not the midnight hour,
or nighttime's death so sour.
It's the truth of daytime,
lighting up all your crimes
I came back to read this again my friend and got a little more out from it, I hope you don't mind. I face myself every time I shave or run a brush through my hair, thinking about things that you've written about Mr. Bolton. My words may be different, but the truths are the same. Well done Sir!


Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...

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