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Better Than Some, Worse Than Others

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Bluesy Socrateaser
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0 posted 12-26-2016 06:11 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Love passed by my window
all of five-foot-four

Relish on the table
anyone know the score?

A hellish night in 'Frisco
led me to believe

A tenderloin is tasted
just above the knee

She left without a whisper
in the ear left by the door

I could have loved her better
if I would have loved her more

[This message has been edited by Ron (01-04-2017 11:56 PM).]

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2islander2
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1 posted 12-26-2016 06:29 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

i think we need time to love someone really,
may be she didn't let you enough time together,
a touching and subtle penning


yann
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2 posted 12-26-2016 06:31 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Classic last two lines, Blues, and I only have one thing to say to that . . . "Ain't dat da truff."

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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3 posted 12-27-2016 12:34 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thank you yann for your sensitive reply.


BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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4 posted 12-27-2016 12:37 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Thanks JerryPat! It sho' is!  

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 12-30-2016 07:56 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

I have read this several times and I like it but I'm kind of at a loss as what to say about it. The line about the relish and the score, put me in mind of a football junkie and they always make me wonder if they are emotionally capable of being that passionate about their mates. It is a sad poem really. ~L
Bluesy Socrateaser
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6 posted 12-30-2016 08:02 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

quote:
I'm kind of at a loss as what to say about it
All things considered, you did fine Lori Rhoden.

Thanks for looking it over as you did. As a writer of poetry, one might say that I'm better than some and worse than others. I generally think like that. It helps keep my head the size I like it to be.


BTS


...just bein' Bluesy
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7 posted 01-02-2017 04:39 PM       View Profile for DaysofView   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DaysofView

I like rhyming poetry and this one is good!

I want to die in my sleep like my grandfather...not like the passengers screaming in the back of his car.

JamesMichael
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8 posted 01-09-2017 09:04 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I suppose if our goal is Love we will achieve it...if the others goal is Love...James
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9 posted 01-10-2017 03:39 AM       View Profile for Boomer Styles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Boomer Styles

Such as it is. Good title too.

One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many.

 
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