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Open Poetry #49

Life Looking For It's End

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite

since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2016-12-17 12:53 PM

Sprinkled fragments of her love
  now strewn upon the floor
Feather dusted from the bed
   old memories come no more.
Darkwoods lightened, stained by the sun
  stories long since told
A figure lingers at the post
  finding herself alone

Time has taken what spirits could not
  her shadow now fills the room
Winds form circles in layers of dust
  which stir within the gloom

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2016-12-17 06:44 AM

I really enjoyed this dusty bit of gloom you penned. You did well saying so much with so few well chosen. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-12-17 09:29 AM

. . . and from an everlasting time upon end . . .

"her shadow now fills the room"

I understand so well, that feeling, and that shadow will forever fill that room.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane

3 posted 2016-12-17 12:17 PM

quote:
"Winds form circles in layers of dust
which stir within the gloom"

Good lines from a sensitive, emotional read.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2016-12-19 11:24 PM

very émotionnal, a feeling of loneliness that spreads and cross the "walls" this has a peculiar meaning during these Christmas days
yann

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