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Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror

0 posted 2016-11-29 02:59 AM



glow worms oxidizing cotton like iron
      illuminating deep caverns in time
smooth shiny legs tick-tock past the gazes
      as her patent finish clears the room

a woman clings to her Whitman Sampler
      while rolling a two-bit piece over her fingers
her face rises to the occasional scent of ale
      passing through the fabric of the place

she turns with a fluid motion
      her limpid pools full of
swimming sensations
      that never made it to shore

reaching out for a single grain of sand
      her touch sends a ripple across the waters
that lay between her coastline
      and a message locked within a bottle

in the darkness of her sleep
      she reaches for the bottle
teasing it further away
      as it glances from her fingertips

the two-bit lost it's balance
      and the Whitmans' were sampled out
I wonder if she'll ever see home again
      I'll be waiting at the shore

...maybe a bottle will come my way


...just bein' Bluesy

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2016-11-29 09:17 AM


Ahhh . . . Waiting for that damned elusive bottle is not without its pleasure. As you scan the ocean deep your thoughts turn to her. The bottle and her co-mingle within your inner self. I'm betting you will grasp the bottle. It will smell of a Whitman Sampler. What happens after that is anybody's guess!

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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
2 posted 2016-11-29 11:59 AM


wonderful and so "pictural", i guess as long there will be shores, there will be bottles at the sea and a lot of expectancies, thanks for a great reading here
yann



Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
3 posted 2016-11-30 01:28 AM


Great reply there JerryPat! Maybe your footprints are on a shoreline somewhere in this world..eh?

Thanks pal.


BTS

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
4 posted 2016-11-30 01:31 AM


yann, your visit is much appreciated! You no doubt have found a bottle or two (on the shore that is ). May your messages all be as good as my last one!

...just bein' Bluesy

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