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DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01
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Just A Slice Of The Pie

0 posted 2016-10-09 11:53 PM


it began as a passing fancy
or so it was described
a flash in the pan, Oh! Mercy!
coming in and then out like the tide

the years, some said, would make a difference
when the boredom of time settles in
surely this "love" will have ended
twice as fast as it did begin

so wished those of envious displeasure
with ears full of septic-like waste
lips that could make crystal shatter
and tongues layered with a vulgar distaste

to dispatch these rogues of their language
would to me be like swatting a fly
however as the tin cans followed behind us
it was much sweeter just to tell them good-Bye

I want to die in my sleep like my grandfather...not like the passengers screaming in the back of his car.

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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
1 posted 2016-10-10 04:52 AM


quote:
so wished those of envious displeasure
with ears full of septic-like waste
A fine poem with cleverly constructed analogies.


BTS


...just bein' Bluesy

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2016-10-10 11:43 AM


Loved it.Loved it.LOVED it!

This is a gritty piece of poetry, DV, without being vulgar about it. I absolutely love it when when I am surprised when a poem makes me smile as I read its ending lines.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Boomer Styles
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since 2014-03-02
Posts 194
South Side Of Success
3 posted 2016-10-11 09:55 PM


Different stroke for you Stacy Lynn! I'm liking it a lot!

P.S What's up with Billy Willy-Nilly? Tap it out to me!

One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many.

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