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Ari Squire
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In The Phallus Lane

0 posted 2016-07-26 04:13 AM


You were always as a tiny island
in a vast sea of my dreams

Shipwrecked, I floated about
in that rolling, turbulent sea
for year after year until finally
washing up upon your warm, sandy shore

You were there waiting all along
Had a single wave been differently placed,
I may have floated by and simply perished
without ever seeing you or knowing you

Who then would know of our heartaches?
Who would love you and I so deeply
and eternally as you and I love one another?

God knows, of all the tragedies
that have ever been in this world,
all that are and all that will be,
there is one less because of His mercy

     ...you and I Linny honey, you and I

"An invisible red thread connects those who are destined to meet, regardless of time, place, or circumstance. The thread may stretch or tangle, but will never break."
                  --An ancient Chinese belief



Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

© Copyright 2016 Aristotle Squires - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2016-07-26 06:36 AM


Your words of love to your Linny are a joy to read. Keep up the good work! ~L
JerryPat2
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2 posted 2016-07-26 09:25 AM


Got my Mojo working, Ari, to keep you and Linny safe and forever together!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Ari Squire
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3 posted 2016-07-26 02:10 PM


So many thanks Lori and Jerry for your kind words in reply, and a special thanks to you Jerry for that "mojo". Anyone who's ever been 'adrift' knows the value having with them anything that floats.

Thanks again to you both.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2016-07-27 05:39 PM


Hi Ari, love your poem!!  Both the romance and spiritual vibe are so eloquently expressed.  Really nice writing.
Ari Squire
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5 posted 2016-07-27 08:39 PM


Hi Blues, thank you so much for your thoughtful reply. Your visit is greatly appreciated.

Ari


Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

Redstart
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6 posted 2016-07-31 05:43 PM


The wave that made the day, was the wave. Fate gifts the lucky . x

Ari Squire
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7 posted 2016-07-31 10:34 PM


Thanks Red, providence was an understudy to the miracle-maker.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

Redstart
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8 posted 2016-08-27 01:33 AM


Try to use 'you' and 'I' less, especially in the title. Wonderful, poetic biography, if perhaps, a tad sieved.
Ari Squire
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9 posted 2016-08-27 02:31 AM


Why would I want to do that Red?

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

Redstart
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10 posted 2016-08-30 06:02 PM


Because you are the master of such?
LeeJ
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11 posted 2016-08-31 01:04 PM


ahhhh, Ari, I have always believed we cross each others paths, even for a brief moment, for an exchange of words in a restaurant over coffee...twas meant to be...fate is such a miracle, and BTW, loved this poem.  Thank you...for writing and sharing this heartfelt gem.  
Ari Squire
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12 posted 2016-08-31 02:00 PM


Thanks for reading and your warm reply Lee. Good hearing from you.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

2islander2
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by the sea
13 posted 2016-08-31 10:01 PM


brilliant, love can save a life, thanks for the touching poem


yann


Ari Squire
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14 posted 2016-09-01 12:29 PM


You're very kind yann...thanks so much.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

rainyday
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15 posted 2016-09-06 01:52 AM


A love to cherish, beautifully written Ari.
Made me think of the song too.

Ari Squire
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16 posted 2016-09-06 03:45 AM


Thanks Jan...you're sweet.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

JamesMichael
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17 posted 2016-10-27 06:14 PM


nice...james
Jack Napes
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18 posted 2016-10-29 12:28 PM


Metaphorical romanticism at it's poetic best. Now, if only one could merge a parallel reality, that would be quite the love affair.

Touch, but don't look

Bluesy Socrateaser
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19 posted 2016-10-29 12:59 PM


If Columbus would have felt that way when he came ashore, things may have turned out differently. The Indians never had a chance.

...just bein' Bluesy

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