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Open Poetry #49

Shifting Gears

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2016-07-11 03:08 PM

Grinding it into second
with a burned out clutch
lurching along in my gray
bundle of nerves mobile.
A lot of miles under my hood
and I’ve just sat way too long
letting her go to hell.
She’s hard to start,
won’t run in the heat
and smokes.
On the rearview hangs
regrets, guilt and shame
in a handmade sachet
scented in the lowest
of self-esteems.
There also hangs
a teardrop crystal
of joy and hope
full of my rainbow dreams.
Just to remind me
where I’m going.

Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane

1 posted 2016-07-11 03:58 PM

quote:
"my gray
bundle of nerves mobile"

Didn't think there were any of those old timers left (the car, not you). The smokers are even more rare. Entertaining poetry Lori.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2016-07-11 06:10 PM

Thanks Ari! I appreciate your comment! ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2016-07-11 08:39 PM

"scented in the lowest
of self-esteems."

Ahhh . . . A bit too hard on yourself in my opinion. But liked the optimism following these lines.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2016-07-11 09:25 PM

nice writing...james

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