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jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2016-05-16 12:05 PM


Palm Springs commercial photography

The heavens wore gray
a blanket of clouds hovered
ensuing a roiling interplay
of sun and impending shower
wrestling for control of the sky.

I was feeling gleefully energized
brazen enough to dare the rain to fall,
command the clouds to move away,
anything more promising I left
on the lap of gods in full confidence.

With the air streaming with possibilities
my eyes glazed hypnotic at a distant vision
a flock of blackbirds exploding out of a tree
my cue to disregard some measure of deference
to a weather which at any moment may go rogue

Taunting the skies to behave
I set out for a walk on a trail which led
to a winding road that rimmed the lakefront
stark silhouettes of trees looked eerie yet haughty
their skeleton branches spread in wild abandon.

The somnolent quiet sank into my bones
as I breathed in this solitude owning my space
but a storm came and flung me into the suck of wind,
the sting of rain drenched and soaked me
wet to my skin, shivering and cold.

Unflinching, I carried my own kind of survival
like a badge of honor, though I tempted the rains
which took on my bluff, I had shaken my fist
on the gods that be who were clearly not amused
but did not plunge me into an avalanche of mud.


@jjote 05/15/2016


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Pete_W
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Posts 185
Scotland (UK)
1 posted 2016-05-16 06:13 AM


Enjoyed joining you on your walk to the lake, lovely images. Sorry it rained. Thanks.
Pete

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2016-05-16 09:23 AM


Leastwise you didn't take a plunge into the mud. Yuck! Like Pete I enjoyed the walk with you, but ya had to know, jjote, that the thunder gods really don't like to be bluffed by a shaking fist.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2016-05-19 08:30 PM


nice writing...james
latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
4 posted 2016-06-01 10:52 PM


Enjoyed the walk along this beautiful path,JO.
JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
5 posted 2016-06-04 04:41 PM


jjote,

Beautiful expression in this write,
love the line:
"of sun and impending shower
wrestling for control of the sky."

Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
6 posted 2016-06-12 06:13 PM


I picture you directing the orchestra before you, eloquent and skilled rendition here.

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
7 posted 2016-06-13 10:39 AM


Have to "echo" everyone above mes "thoughts" on this... I even enjoyed the rain.  I love the rain! We've had over 20-25 inches per my rain gauge in the last month.


j.


jjote
Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
8 posted 2016-06-24 03:44 PM


Sorry for not responding sooner, been away and didn't get to read your comments, but thanks so much for those kind words. You make it so worthwhile to try to write another one, though the knack escapes me right now
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