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Cari
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Englnand

0 posted 2016-05-13 08:59 AM





I’m the bearer of priceless things
Golden Bracelets, diamond rings
Spend, spend, I’ll foot the bill
If you will only say “I will”
~
We’ll purchase a mansion in Milton Keynes
To satisfy your wildest dreams
I’ll hang a Renoir in the hall
Escort you to the Debutants ball
~
Two expensive cars, a cracking pair
Both in yellow to match your hair
A Lamborghini and a Porsche
An egg for Easter, Faberge of course
~
I’ll treasure you in every way
Pleasure you by night and day
Ignore your squint and nervous twitches
Scratch your back just where it itches
~
So you’re lucky, don’t you see
To have found a gorgeous guy like me
What, you’re leaving now, are you sure?
Ok doll, just shut the door
*
*


Girls, don’t fall for chat up lines. Take half what a guy tells you on a first date, then divide by half again to get somewhere near the truth. But spare a thought for us poor males. If we had only our good looks and sparkling personality to rely on, I for one would have probably ended up with Quasimodo’s daughter.

[This message has been edited by Cari (05-13-2016 11:32 AM).]

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jjote
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since 2002-12-25
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Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2016-05-13 09:45 AM


why 2 cars, so I could settle for only one? emjoyed the postcript to the poem also. You never know Quasimodo's daughter could be an enchantress you can bring roses to.
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
2 posted 2016-05-13 11:03 AM


The dating game. Deceit usually works on both the male and female sides. If they are basically honest they will reveal their true selves as the "courting" progresses.

Uh, a bit of nit-picking here. In the next to last stanza I believe where you have "you're" it should be your.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Cari
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Englnand
3 posted 2016-05-13 11:35 AM


You’re right Jerry, damn spell check, corrected.

  Cari.

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
4 posted 2016-05-13 04:43 PM




Good piece . . . j.

Pete_W
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Scotland (UK)
5 posted 2016-05-14 06:57 AM


Nicely done Cari, your 4th stanza really made me smile... "Quasimodo's daughter, you were lucky!" Thanks for the read.
Pete

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2016-06-27 10:10 PM


Nice flow of thoughts...james
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