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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2016-04-07 03:06 PM



it is how we compose our verse
which frees us
of our measured limitations
the words flow
the line takes shape
attending to our heartfelt contemplation
the keyboard has replaced ink
for the most part
still . . . it is word power superglue
which holds us together
healing wounds, soothing scars
from the depths of us
poetry is self analyzing in play
mending our fears
our words, simple or complicated
is our outspoken oeuvre
the voice of our spirit
as we attempt to transfer our passion
to you, dear reader
poetry . . .
our steadfast refuge
where we dwell  in complete disclosure
our poetry
is not the end all of our journey
because, quite frankly
we have the courage to seek out
and dare to wonder

© Copyright 2016 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
ice
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since 2003-05-17
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1 posted 2016-04-08 07:31 AM


You 'bout summed it up in this one Mr. Jerry

"it is word power superglue
which holds us together"

Yes sir...it is a super glue..... :-)
And I am greatful for its invention.

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

jjote
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2 posted 2016-04-08 08:11 AM


poetry lets us look at something, someone with fresh eyes...a toadt to the muse!
JerryPat2
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3 posted 2016-04-08 08:13 AM


. . . and so am I grateful for that superglue, Ice. Thank you much for your comments . . .

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2016-04-08 08:15 AM


Absolutely! You called it right, jjote.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Cari
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Englnand
5 posted 2016-04-10 08:45 AM


I used to do critiques on other forums before I dumped them because I found it’s impossible to keep from criticising others work from your own favoured preferences of how it should be written. Confining yourself to very personal poetry has a downside; it’s only a matter of time before you are repeating yourself with the same limited content. Observation and imagination gives you the freedom to spread your wings and fly.

Cari.

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2016-04-10 09:19 AM


You are absolutely right, in that "Observation and imagination" gives the poets the freedom of openness to search out and pen poems about these feelings. I do attempt to not get in a rut with my writing, although I know I do sometimes when I write about my own life. But it is my life and so much happened within the "street" days, some of it just has to com out.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

DaysofView
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7 posted 2016-04-10 10:57 PM


I like the in common of poetry! I mean I like it for myself not having to stay on the track to keep my train together. I can choo choo charlie any direction I want to and nobody says for me to get back on the track!! So many great things to find in your words Jerrypat! You know alot because you learned alot and you have a sharp sense of street moxie!

If I were more than I am, I'd see things differently instead of the same all the time.

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2016-04-10 11:07 PM


DV, many thanks for your very kind comments tonight. Yeah, about that moxie, it has gotten me in more trouble than anything else, but heck, it is what it is.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Cari
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9 posted 2016-04-11 06:50 AM



I wasn’t being critical of anyone, if by setting down your feelings about your personal life is beneficial to you, then fine. I was merely making the point that in regards to the content of our poetry it’s restricted to a personal level.

An interesting post which could turn into a discussion on how we all write our poetry.
A fault I had was spreading emotion and over embellishment on my scribblings with a trowel.

A few tips that hopefully has improved my poetry.

I found the answer in reading good poetry. For example, finding a poet who could say in a single line what would take me three or four lines to say.
Don’t tell me a girl or a rose is beautiful, show me why they are. Try to avoid clichés; relationship poems are notorious for clichés ‘my beating heart’, ‘I will always love you’ and so on. A good tip is to avoid anything you can find in a Valentine card verse.

Lastly, take your time, if it takes you five or ten minutes to write a poem, it will almost certainly read like it took five or ten minutes to write. Every word in a poem has to earn its place, if you know a verse is offline it’s very likely your readers will know as well.

A single poem that hopefully has cured my fault of over embellishment in my poetry is
John Betjeman’s. Death in Leamington. He was nineteen when he wrote the poem and that’s pretty amazing.

Cari.

[This message has been edited by Cari (04-11-2016 08:08 AM).]

JerryPat2
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10 posted 2016-04-11 07:15 AM


Thank you very much Cari. I readJohn Betjeman’s. Death in Leamington . . . Very well written, especially for a nineteen-year-old.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

booky1940!
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11 posted 2016-04-11 10:57 AM


"The word flow
The line takes shape
For the most part
The voice of our spirit"
A wonderful piece of work!

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2016-04-11 12:48 PM


Thank you booky, for reading and commenting!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

latearrival
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13 posted 2016-04-12 01:08 AM


Good Jerry.You tell it like it is and that is why you have many readers. I found I write a bit differently with pen or pencil then I do on the computer.I was a letter writer for many years starting from the time I could put a few words together and hold a pencil or pen. I wonder if you or any one else find that difference in their writing when using a different writing instrument.  Best to you,JO
Ari Squire
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In The Phallus Lane
14 posted 2016-04-13 09:23 PM


Some poets write their truths while others invent them. I like reading your poetry because it relates solely on the former and rarely, if ever, on the latter.

I like to write handwritten letters to some, but now prefer mostly to use the processor. Corrections are easy and I can 'hear' my inner voice talking to me more freely...or so it seems.  

More feelings and fewer words please

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