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jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2016-03-26 08:42 PM


Palm Springs commercial photography
[not me - just making up inspired by the foto]


She loved him in silence
an abstract kind of way
like loving a painting
gazing at a sunset.
impersonal, unreal.

But now she wondered why
his absence made her feel
a sense of empty space,
nameless fears gripping her
joy never to expect.

They roamed wild in her mind
a path with boundaries
vague like phantom shapes so
invincible against
a sky bruised by darkness

She waited out the last
small hints of light fading
into the fog, dark thoughts
crawling like a spider
taking charge of her dreams.

Menacing and taunting
like an ice storm warning
her heart lay freezing cold
no warm radiance softening
the vengeance she nurtured.


@jjote 03/26/2016

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2016-03-26 09:59 PM


quote:
They roamed wild in her mind
a path with boundaries

So sorry, but I would have had no boundaries at all.

This whole poem touched me, turned me on, "grabbed me"

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2016-03-26 11:17 PM


glad it "grabbed" you, but boundaries that are vague would mean no boundaries at all, so we're in sync here.
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2016-03-26 11:23 PM


Loved this piece, my friend, and agree, more or less, with both you and Jerry on the boundaries, but enjoyed the more "poetical" and deeper way in which you phrased it.

jimmy

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