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You Promised Me Tomorrow
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You Promised Me Tomorrow |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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One of these blues things I love to write... Promised Me Tommorrow When I look at other faces Lord, all I see is you There's no fillin in the spaces I just can't face the truth Now the days run so long The world don't look the same When I get up in the mornin I wonder who's to blame Here come the mem'ries To start another day, I keep searchin for forgiveness In the words you used to say You promised me tomorrow, But left me yesterday Everyday I can hear you swimin through my soul As you pass by my ears You always say hello But I wake up all alone TV shoutin like an auction Whiskey and late show My only escape options Here come the mem'ries To start another day, I keep searchin for forgiveness In the words you used to say You promised me tomorrow, But left me yesterday (Bridge) I only had one heart now I don't know what to do Don't know where to turn cause I gave it all to you. Here come the mem'ries To start another day, I keep searchin for forgiveness In the words you used to say You promised me tomorrow, But left me yesterday |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . This sounds like a keeper and a hit into the Top Ten. Really. I'd love to hear this one put to music, Eric. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Jerry I'd sure love to see it turn into a hit. Just never know. I appreciate the kind words. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Don't know how, in your mind, you wrote it, Eric, but I'm on the dance floor closer than close with a very interesting woman who seems to be feeling the same thoughts as do I. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jerry, you're in an enviable position then, enjoy every minute! Thanks my friend! true love never looks after it's own interests |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
if one can only post music here, I'd sure love to hear this poem turn into a blues song. Keep on, ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks JJ it's got a good bluesy melody and rolls out there quite slow. A7th D7th E7th progression with a DM and EM - B7th bridge... I may be able to post it here after the demo is done. I appreciate the visit. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
very creative...james |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks James I appreciate the visit and the comment. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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MissMarti Member Posts 87 USA |
Oh, I loved this despite the sadness to it. You could take this on the road and it would become a huge hit song! Hugz, Marti "He wI'll lead you safely through all things: |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you MissMarti I appreciate the nice comment. I'd love to be able to make a hit song out of it. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Eric "The blues will heal ya" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Martie Long time no communicate. Yeah, John Lee Hooker, "The Blues Will Heal Ya". Nice to hear from you.... Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"But I wake up all alone TV shoutin like an auction Whiskey and late show My only escape options" really like that.... Perfect bridge...fits well Like the whole song..No barroom, mens room smell..no sequins, or big hats...just a plain, good ole country blues song..sung by a man alone. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you ice. Tried to capture that lonely feeling through a blues lyric. I really appreciate the positive comment. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Excellent. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Ida, I really appreciate that! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Really enjoyed reading this one.Whish I could hear it sung.JO |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Jo I appreciate the comment and wish for the singing, never know, it might come back all dressed in music someday. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
Sigh! The memories of once upon a time a very long time ago. Nice Eric. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks tp I appreciate the visit and the comment. If the lyric can stir up those moods in a reader then it makes me satisfied and happy. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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