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Cari
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Englnand

0 posted 2016-03-10 03:51 AM



The Missing Ingredient


Metaphors like semaphores
Are running through my head
I’m wasting my time
The words don’t rhyme
I’ll think I’ll go to bed
~
But I toss and turn and still return
Searching for that elusive thing
To make the ultimate poem unique
To make it flow and sing
~
What I’m looking for I cannot guess
Morning dawns without success
I’m crunching toast and drinking tea
When Mandy climbs upon my knee
~
“Daddy mummy feeds the baby
And I really wonder why
Cos Judy’s mummy’s feeds it
On milk she has to buy”
~
“Well it’s really up to mummy
There are two ways she can use
From herself or from a bottle
It’s up to her to choose”
~
“I think that God is very clever
To make babies that cannot chew
Cos teeth could bite their mummy’s
And that clearly wouldn’t do”

Of course the missing ingredient
I have for some time sought
The ultimate poem must contain
A pearl of original thought
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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
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1 posted 2016-03-10 09:41 AM


Ahhh . . . This is one hell of a poem, Cari, to say I liked it is a misstatement to be sure . . . but . . . I like it . . . "pearl of original thought" is hard as hell to come up with.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Cari
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Posts 411
Englnand
2 posted 2016-03-10 10:36 AM


From the mouths of babes my friend.

Thanks for reading; I look forward to your comments on my drivel.

jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2016-03-10 05:07 PM


no such thing as original thought, words and ideas are handed down from generations, yet why do we write and read poetry - it's just perhaps one can take these ideas in many different ways, lift them out from wherever they must have come from - from the caves of Eden or the palaces of kings - and that's how the pearls are made..am I making sense? but poetry need not because it's the poet's license one shouldn't tinker with..
Cari
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Posts 411
Englnand
4 posted 2016-03-10 05:17 PM


Oh I know of many who would disagree with you, but let that pass. Thank you for reading.

Cari.

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2016-03-10 05:45 PM


Big smile on my face at the end.
Gotta love those kids and their perfect innocence.

Wonderful when they're young.

Rogers and Hammerstein realized the irony of that...

"They've got to be taught, before it's too late,
to hate all the things their relatives hate,
before they are six or seven or eight
they've got to be carefully taught"

true love never looks after it's own interests

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