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rainyday
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Heartland USA

0 posted 2016-02-21 08:15 PM





~She's the Last to Leave the Fair~

She's the last
to leave the fair,
this hopeful child
with initials carved
on her favorite
carnival horse.

Misty blue eyes
that smile in the rain,
canvas filled walls
of magic explosions,
created from the wands
of her talented hands.

This carefree
compassionate heart
with hippie soul,
born too late to be
part of that generation,
but she would have
marched at the forefront,
tie-dyed skirt blowing in the wind,
ideals braided in her hair.

She's the last to leave the fair,
and I'd like to bottle
her zest
and spritz the world.

"Oh..to live on Sugar Mountain..
with the barkers and the colored balloons"
~Neil Young

© Jan S.


[This message has been edited by rainyday (02-21-2016 09:12 PM).]

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2016-02-21 08:22 PM


quote:
and I'd like to bottle
her zest
and spritz the world.

That just says it all, rainy, and it says a lot. I have met many who wish they had been of age for the hippie goings on . . . I was there, for the most part in Los Angeles and San Francisco, touching base in New Orleans for a while. It was something else, believe me.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
2 posted 2016-02-21 08:26 PM


Thank you JP, This was a Poem written about my daughter, she was born too late to be part of that generation,
but she would have fit in perfectly.  

Thanks again for your read Poet.
J

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
3 posted 2016-02-21 08:35 PM


"You can't be twenty on Sugar Mountain
Though you're thinking that you're leaving there too soon
You're leaving there too soon"

Sugar mountain is a state of mind..
Twenty is a sate of time..

I believe that you and your daughter will always be able to go on suagr mountain..

Wonderful poem.

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rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
4 posted 2016-02-21 09:30 PM


Ice, Thank you for the Dear comments,
yes..those lines by Neil Young..Love them.

Pic is up lol
Thanks for the heads up my friend.

J

Cari
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Posts 411
Englnand
5 posted 2016-02-22 06:03 AM


What caught my eye was the title, “She's the Last to Leave the Fair”

I truly can’t think of a more intriguing one, and that’s from someone that has read masses of poems.
The poem itself goes beyond simple nostalgia to wish be born in a time when we could travel on the Orient Express of the 1930s. Or to dine with Oscar Wilde, Dickens, and Kipling just to listen to the conservation, the list goes on.

Returning to your title, I’m reminded of the old English folk song “I'm seventeen come Sunday”
How old are you, my pretty fair maid? How old are you, my honey?
She answered me right cheerfully, I'm seventeen come Sunday.

Thank you for this delightful poem, and if I’m allowed, with a big hug for that title.

Cari.

rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
6 posted 2016-02-22 09:13 PM


Quite a wonderful response Cari, Thank you.
Yes, that Title..made me think of how she
(my daughter)is so in love with life.
Thanks again for your generous comments.

Hugs back to you..
J

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2016-02-23 08:39 PM


very nice writing...james
rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
8 posted 2016-02-23 11:28 PM


Thank you James, I appreciate your read & comment.

J

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