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Redstart
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since 2014-05-16
Posts 535


0 posted 2016-02-13 08:47 PM



White screen, what will you now become?
Shall I lead you as you offer
warm-ruby breath of past romance,
or will cruel imps insist upon
another, silent scraping of the mind?

Will you dance a cradled waltz
through cherished dreams of yesterday?
Or will that two-faced sailor, memory,
tack headlong to the maw of casual misery?

Beware, that sleek and guileful
slayer of serenity,
he serves a cat-o'-nine-tails justice.

Can I avoid those anvil words?
Would they bruise your eager toes?
For I might travel down.
Down too deep for dancing.
Down, deep enough for darkness;
dark enough for deepness.

Be still, white screen,
I might venture where shadows
silhouette the dead.
Where guilt rides, in triumph,
a paler horse than death.
Where schadenfreude-fuelled
bullyings of the conscience
ply their tiresome trade.
Too old to surprise;
too persistent to truly hurt.

No, there'll be no dancing;
not tonight.
So spread your snowy shall
upon my peace,
and let me sleep.

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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2016-02-14 08:53 PM


I'm reminded of white noise and steady static.  Your poem is sad and the despair is tangible.
Your writing made me feel deeply,  and that to me is really good poetry.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2016-02-14 09:25 PM


The below set the whole poem up in my opinion. The fantastic words in this one moved me so much that I was almost wanting the dark to overwhelm the white.
quote:
Beware, that sleek and guileful
slayer of serenity,

But it didn't and that is, of course a good thing. If I had tried to write this poem "back then," the dark would have won the battle. Damn good writing, Redstart.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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