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MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

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Lancashire England

0 posted 2016-02-10 07:08 AM

Portrait of hope

His hand wavered then slowly felt the golden watch chain
Each link a rosary of love in touch with passing time
Minutes passing, fast or slow, glancing at the face once more
Perpetual movement of the hands each second of despair
Pristine cuffs contrasting with the ebony of his cane
Embellished silver a hallmark of his undying love
Within the golden hunter, fine portrait her subtle smile
But would she come this day as promised neath the willow bare
And still the seconds ticked marking time with his blazing heart
Fine crinoline and parasols like scenes from Renoir’s mind
Boating party on the lake, umbrellas blue, but no rain
He checked once more and then wound the watch hoping time had stopped
A breeze that chills and whispers truths he knows so very well
Eternal hope, within each link, that she would come someday.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2016-02-10 08:55 AM

I thoroughly enjoyed reading "Portrait of hope." The links helping hid imagination that she would surely come . . . Excellent!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

2 posted 2016-02-10 09:23 AM

Thanks Jerry, hope all is well with you
Michael

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2016-02-10 10:17 AM

A breeze that chills and whispers truths he knows so very well
Eternal hope, within each link, that she would come someday.

Beautifully, intensely melancholic, but the hope is still there.

Wonderfully written.

Margherita

"Forget every touch or sound that did not teach you how to dance."
(Rumi)

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2016-02-10 10:20 AM

Very nice indeed!
Your creation of word pictures to set the scene is excellent.
Very enjoyable read.
Love some of the ambiguity.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

5 posted 2016-02-10 10:41 AM

thanks Margherita and Eric
please read 'Poetry of despair' if you wish that is.

Michael

[This message has been edited by MICHELMAS (02-12-2016 04:19 AM).]

MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

6 posted 2016-02-12 04:21 AM

this is Paris in c 1880, a park bench.
please read 'Portrait of despair'

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