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MissMarti
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0 posted 2016-02-06 12:39 PM





       Photo Courtesy of S. Kimball
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booky1940!
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1 posted 2016-02-06 04:24 PM


That's a real beauty to look at!
Margherita
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2 posted 2016-02-06 05:36 PM


Absolutely awesome, dear Marti! Keep them coming!

Love,
Margherita

"Forget every touch or sound that did not teach you how to dance."
(Rumi)

MissMarti
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3 posted 2016-02-06 07:45 PM


Books, thank you so much for dropping by to read my haiku!

MissMarti

"Faith is taking the first step
Even when you don't see the whole staircase."
     MLK

MissMarti
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4 posted 2016-02-06 07:48 PM


Margarita, thanks dear lady. I am not thrilled with the 3rd line; I think the wording is awkward. My mind suddenly went blank!! Any suggestions?


Margherita
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5 posted 2016-02-07 07:36 AM


Dear Marti, the intention of your third line is just perfect. I understand your doubts about the wording. If you used "lighting" there would have been one more syllable. Maybe one could say "lambent light to Spring", using an adjective and a noun instead of the verb. But it is really a beautiful thought expressed in your haiku, dear Marti.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

"Forget every touch or sound that did not teach you how to dance."
(Rumi)

jwesley
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6 posted 2016-02-07 11:35 AM


Awesome!

j.

ethome
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7 posted 2016-02-07 12:32 PM


Beautiful photo and your words express it perfectly.

true love never looks after it's own interests

DaysofView
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8 posted 2016-02-07 12:37 PM


Cool picture!

If I were more than I am, I'd see things differently instead of the same all the time.

Marchmadness
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9 posted 2016-02-07 04:20 PM


Love it!.

JL
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10 posted 2016-02-07 08:35 PM


WOW! Beautiful write and picture, excellent!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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