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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2016-02-01 01:59 PM

In the night light,
I think of Emilie
I think of the moon
Where she eats blueberries,
I think of Caroline,
I think of stars
Where she undresses,
In the night light,
I think of many girls,
I think of the earth
Where they do stupid things,
I think of the easy ones,
To Claire and to the most beautiful,
I would like that one tells me,
That she thinks of me
In the night light
That she thinks of me too …

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2016-02-01 02:39 PM

Very nice read..:-)

The moon where I live is right now, a half circle.

Perhaps the moon-light at this stage is right for Emilie to ponder-remember?..

It allows the starlight to be not as diminished, as when it is full, and Carolines deeper thoughts are made brighter by it being so?

And Claire--She cannot help but think of you, when the all of the night lights are just right..

enjoyed your poem

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-02-01 02:53 PM

Ahhh . . . Excellent writing, Yann. Yes, when alone we like to bring images to play within our subconsciousness. It is a beautiful way to wile away the time. I know I do. I think of the women in my life, and why they are there and not sitting beside me, and I have to cringe s bit.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2016-02-01 09:33 PM

nice writing...james

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2016-02-02 04:37 AM

Nice writing Yann, I like how you ponder the scene with loving wonder. Enjoyed.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2016-02-02 11:38 AM

thanks Oce, jery james and ethome for reading and offering very pleasant and interesting comments

have a nice day

yann

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2016-02-02 10:41 PM

Beautiful, thoughtful poem yann.
Ida

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2016-02-03 03:50 PM

Delightful poem, dear Yann. Your imagery is beautifully creative, a joy to read really.

So true that on Earth so many stupid things are done which damage humanity so profoundly. Thinking of love and ways to share hearts and souls is what activates the best chords within people's minds.

Believe in a heart that beats faster ... as the girl is thinking of you.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2016-02-17 09:49 PM

revisit...a pleasure to read...james

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2016-02-18 02:39 AM

thanks ida,
i wish you the best
yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2016-02-18 02:41 AM

thanks Margherita, tour words are a so convincing chord, your comment illuminate the poem and this is a true feeling

thanks

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

11 posted 2016-02-18 02:42 AM

thanks james,

have a nice day

yann

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