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Margherita
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Eternity

0 posted 2016-01-20 10:39 AM



  

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An empty swing sighs:
I am invited to dream
soft rocking brings peace

Alignment to cosmic flow
nourishment for hungry soul



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© Copyright 2016 Margherita Rueger - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2016-01-20 06:46 PM


Oh boy, you have just melted my soul with your words and that exceptional photo, Margherita!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

ice
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2 posted 2016-01-20 06:47 PM


Applause!

You did it.....:-)

Picture matches the poem perfectlyy.

Tanka is an economic way to greatly express heartfelt emotion... this poems storyline does that exactly.

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

DaysofView
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Just A Slice Of The Pie
3 posted 2016-01-20 08:18 PM


Billy and me have a swing that hangs from an old oak. There's a love seat that swings on the porch that's nice when its warmer too. I always love your poems and pictures!

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2016-01-21 12:42 PM


looks inviting...nice writing Margherita...james
Margherita
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5 posted 2016-01-21 09:38 AM


Dear Jerry, thank you! I am happy that you enjoyed this moment of blissful dreaming.

Thank you, dear Ford, for the applause and the inspiration in the first place! You are right, those two added lines (to the haiku form) allow a greater sharing of feelings. I did enjoy doing it and I will certainly create some more.

I am very happy for you, dear Stacy Lynn, that you and your Billy have such a source of bliss in your garden! Thank you for your kind appreciation!

Yes it does, dear James. Whenever there is an opportunity like this we must profit from it! Thank you for enjoying this.



Love and bliss.
Margherita

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