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2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2016-01-15 08:42 AM

I write poetry
And have no country to live,
I like poetry
And have no one to love,
I beg your pardon kisses,
You know things I don't know

(first poem i wrote in English since 5 years)

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2016-01-15 01:35 PM

Dear Yann, it's a joy to see you here with this remarkable poem. It is in a way haunting ... very melancholic. There is this yearning for feeling really at home in some place, for someone to love and to be loved by, but it is a fertile mood to follow your inspiration as a Poet. And you have written a beautiful piece here in English. Bravo!

Love,
Margherita

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2016-01-16 01:03 AM

thanks Margherita, you sum up my mind , thanks for your kind and comprehensive words, the poem may seem so simple
have a nice day

yann

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2016-01-23 05:26 PM

enjoyed reading this...james

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2016-01-23 06:42 PM

Great going, Yann, and although the poem may be a simple poem there is excitement in each and every darn line.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (01-23-2016 07:22 PM).]

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2016-01-25 10:15 AM

thanks james and jerry for reading and appreciating
yann

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2016-02-04 10:32 PM

This nay have been yoir first attempt at poetry in English yann but you certainly got your point across.
Ida

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2016-02-05 01:28 PM

thanks ida, during some times, i was using a translator from a french poem,
but sometimes this is akward and not efficient

this poem wad thought in English first with simple and concrete words

thanks for taking time

yann

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