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Open Poetry #49

Sense of Concupiscence

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line

0 posted 2016-01-13 02:03 AM

Feeling the silence between the walls
Hearing only through touch

Heavy vapor hovers over painted lips
A procession passes beyond the pews

An apocalypse in kisses
Impaled upon my heart

Her dying left me empty
A love left unfulfilled

Yet from my pain
Came great pleasure

From my torment
Came great relief

But from my life?
Only death comes to replace it

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2016-01-13 06:17 AM

Very powerful Capo. You paint strong images and emotion. A bit Van Gough. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-01-13 08:52 AM

Each stanza stands alone as grand implementations concerning life . . . Love . . . Death. I really liked this one.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

DaysofView
Member

since 2014-04-01

Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie

3 posted 2016-01-13 07:23 PM

I wish you would just stop writing about death all the time! I like you and TF made me really sad but I'm glad you're okay thanks to lori. I like most of your poems but stop dying all the time! Just remember if you die you can't write anymore poems good or bad! Don't be mad at me just don't be sad because you have alot of friends here.

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line

4 posted 2016-01-14 12:47 PM

I'm deeply sorry for any misunderstandings mon cher Days. I am quite intact, all 5'10, 175 pounds of me. TF is actually a fine chap mostly, but he pushes a bit much when he probably shouldn't.

I do so appreciate your fiery chastisement and will make an effort to focus myself more to your worthy pleasure.

Merci beaucoup mon cher amie,

Capo

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

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