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Mr Martini
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Beneath The Line

0 posted 2016-01-09 11:37 PM


Laying on the grass
My first love and I
With the moon glowing
In her dark brown eyes
Singing lullabies we knew
Still fresh and fun
Wishes flowed freely
Between our thoughts
...and our spiraling celestial dreams
Dreams which seared the night sky like a comet's tail
...then faded as gently as a spent candle

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2016-01-10 06:44 AM


How true the way dreams and love when we are young Capo. You captured it well. You are double endowed in that you can write sweet as you can sinister. ~L
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
2 posted 2016-01-10 09:28 AM


quote:
...and our spiraling celestial dreams
Dreams which seared the night sky like a comet's tail


They faded away but how fresh the memory still is ...

Absolutely enchanting, dear Capo!

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
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3 posted 2016-01-10 09:28 AM


Yes indeed, that first love and the dreams which surely accompany it, Mr Martini. Nice, very sweet homage to love in its infancy.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

rainyday
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Heartland USA
4 posted 2016-01-10 10:34 AM


'Dreams which seared the night sky like a comet's tail
...then faded as gently as a spent candle'
Great lines!..enjoyed the read Poet
Martini.

rainyJ

DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01
Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie
5 posted 2016-01-10 06:27 PM


I always like you and your poems and I'm really happy you're not dead like TF said you were!

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

Mr Martini
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Posts 366
Beneath The Line
6 posted 2016-01-11 02:47 AM


Thank you all for your kind replies.

Mon cher Stacy Lynn, you have a precious heart and a caring spirit.
Mr. Fingers is a talented fellow who also has a good heart, though he is something of a prankster. Accept this little note of mine as a token of appreciation for your support during the perceived crisis of my demise.

Au revoir mon cher amie,

Capo

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

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