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DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01
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Just A Slice Of The Pie

0 posted 2016-01-04 12:25 PM


a peaceful silence
one void of death and sorrows
one filled with the promise
of wonderful tomorrows
pulling you close to me
from your raging waters of despondency
and those gale-force winds of loneliness

on those winds of change
do your clouds of sorrows fly
changing you with my slightest breeze
and making you feel
like you've been swept
up by a hurricane

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2016-01-04 01:32 AM


"Peaceful silence". Nothing affects our mood in a more positive way than peaceful silence.

It's a great promise, dear Stacy Lynn. Let that healing breeze do its magic.

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2016-01-04 11:43 AM


I hear you DV. "clouds of sorrows" and a "hurricane" is a good way to put it.

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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2016-01-04 12:55 PM


Easy breezy poem with lots of good thoughts to ponder.  


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2016-01-05 08:14 PM


this is nice...james
DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01
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Just A Slice Of The Pie
5 posted 2016-01-05 08:51 PM


Thanks everyone!

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

sim0riah
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since 2004-09-07
Posts 253
Wyoming USA
6 posted 2016-01-05 09:44 PM


I really enjoyed this,  love the ending!
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