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Cari
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Englnand

0 posted 2015-12-22 06:24 AM




The preachers voice dust dry
In the June warm morning
Even the crucified Christ
Is looking for release
~
I plan thoughts of revenge
With a Sunday afternoon fast ball
My eyes wander to find beauty
Among a garden of floral hats
~
Now on the promise of a fleeting smile
I hang my daydreams
A stumble of words lie discarded
In screwed balls of pencil thin poetry
~
Raise your pillowed head
To think of me
My love is on the night wind
That curtsies at your open window

A word of explanation on the ‘Sunday fast ball’ In England many of our clergy play village cricket, I won’t bore you with the rules, so if you are an American think of baseball and a beamer aimed at your head.


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ice
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since 2003-05-17
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1 posted 2015-12-22 07:39 AM


The "beamer" was aimed at your brin as you sat in the church..thrown by the preachers dry voice, to hit you square between the eyes..

That afternoon you threw the ball back, slammed by your cricket bat pen.

The last stanza explains the title.

great style, and delivery of theme.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2015-12-22 09:10 AM


Oh my, I absolutely love the last two lines, Cari!

~ Do what you have to do to feel right,
I'll do my best to be alright. ~

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