Open Poetry #49 |
Snowy Blur |
rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Snowy Blur~ Staring at twinkling Christmas lights, bits and pieces through snowy blur, glistening warm tear, and holly cheer smile. Pink frosty cheeks, homemade sleds, beat you up the hill, as we chased the cold. You shagged cars, I was too scared, but watched you in awe as if you were an ice-capades performer. Letting go the frozen grip to bumper, falling back pretending to be hurt, me rushing in a slip and slide dash to help you up, you pulling me down to join you in the snow bank belly laughing as I try to shove a mitten of snow down your back. You were mischief with blue eyes, in one of your far away glance's hints a glimmer of old soul, and I know in my knower you're to bring a special glow to my life, yet that light will be fleeting. Warm breath upon cold frosty pane, and I finger write your name.. staring at twinkling Christmas lights, bits and pieces through snowy blur, glistening warm tear, and holly cheer smile, Missing, and Remembering you... © Jan~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . Memories, memories, what would we do without them, Jan. Although some are the hurtful kind as they sorta wear away our thoughts until they are no more than a hazy blur. Still, we search them out . . . ~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Love never really leave our heart, something always brings it back. Your poem is a beautiful rendering of that. ~L |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Snow is a wonderful partner for lovers ... I much enjoyed your reminiscing. Very lovely. Margherita |
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Mr Martini Member Posts 366 Beneath The Line |
"You shagged cars" We use to call this "skitching", and my recollections of it are pure gold, as is your colorful poem my dear. Au Revoir Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"and I know in my knower you're to bring a special glow to my life, yet that light will be fleeting." Excellent write, rainyday. Enjoyed! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Oh I like this one Ms. Rainy--indeed I do. A preteen poem, perhaps..written just before the teenage rush towards adulthood.. This is what I read here, and the reading was fine..:-) "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance." Carl Sandburg |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed reading this...james |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Jp, The 'snowy blur' came from tear filled eyes staring at Xmas-lights..while remembering moments from long ago, Thank you for the read and comments. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
L. Thank you for the sweet reply. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Thank you M, was a little young to be lovers but your response was a lovely one Poetess. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Mr. M,'shagging'...'skitching', must just be a matter of the part of the country one's from. When I discovered through a friend that shagging could mean something TOTALLY different elsewhere & in Briton, had no idea! lol Thanks for the read. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
JL, Thank you for quoting those lines. Pleased you liked Poet. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Ice, You're absolutely right about the timing, keen of you, Thank you for the nice comments. |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Thank you for reading & responding James. |
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