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Missing All Of Them And All Of You
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Missing All Of Them And All Of You |
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Mr Martini Member Posts 366 Beneath The Line 
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She left me They always do I know I'm an easy hit I yearn for each and every one of them that touches me In the vainest of ways, I want them all And I can only give of myself I cannot simply take for too long Still, I believe in sanctities that I cannot uphold So she left me They always do I wanted her to stay, to make me love her alone I need that, I really need that But now she's gone And a whisper murmurs to me as I hold you You, who give me more of what I must have And I, giving you simply what you want So, you left me They always do My heart aches for truth and devotions Love and emotions, to make me feel whole But it only knows lusts that border on madness Cravings for fulfillment of the flesh and a caroling Chorus of nymphs to satisfy them Sharing love and passions born in hell So she left me She took her gods and left me Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow! Powerful stuff!~L |
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Mr Martini Member Posts 366 Beneath The Line |
Stuff? Really Lori Rhoden? Unlike myself, you must not be in need. Oh, I don't mean the need for unlimited pats on the back in the reply box, no. I can certainly accept and co-exist with my shortcomings and critique of my peers, but stuff? Well, if that's what it is for you, than that's what it is. I'll try to do better next time and leave my sensitivities in the toilet trap. There's lot's of gooey "stuff" down there. Au Revoir Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Kind Sir, My deepest regret for using that word. I would not have wounded your feelings, especially on this piece. I was rendered quite speechless upon the first reading and could only manage the "wow". It was so Powerful I really was at a loss. I certainly didn't think stuff to be something to be flushed by any means. I didn't want to assume it was an expose and comment as such, even though I felt it was. The last thing I wanted to do was to sound assumptive or judgmental. Please forgive my poor choice of word. I was going to say that it was so powerful that it blew my mind. Apparently it did if the best I could come up with at the time was stuff. I deeply apologize for unintended wounds inflicted ~L |
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Mr Martini Member Posts 366 Beneath The Line |
Thank you Lori Rhoden. You're of good character, indicative in your reply. Au Revoir Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me! |
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Pete_W Member Posts 185 Scotland (UK) |
It is good and I read it almost as self-confessional, your lines, "You, who give me more of what I must have And I, giving you simply what you want", bring this to mind, "Give all and you may lose all. Hold back and you may find you have not given enough." Enjoyed reading this through several times. Thanks Pete |
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shalisadefa Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114 |
As Pete did I read your poem over and over again...and again. First I didn't quite understand, than I did.. and I became uneasy..Reading about your (?) longing for love and companionship. ending up with solitary lust. It have dealt with this kind of love end ended up leaving. Each and every line you write is a raw confrontation with the past. I know this too well, was not able to make him love me alone.. Alas, I took my demons and left. Heart-wrenching, as I stood at the other side of this confession. |
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