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Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

0 posted 2015-11-19 05:30 PM


pale blue rippling
over black satin linens
so soft a sound
from each rising tide
skimming a stone
over waters of wishes
I couldn't be mistaken
even in this life

thoughts bearing visions
pretending deceptions
love lasting longer
than money could buy
a promise of virtues
left unattended
I couldn't be mistaken
even in this life

felt on the breezes
of breath from her sighing
longings of lovers
left spent in the night
her shining lips
now speak of her passion
I couldn't be mistaken
even in this light

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

© Copyright 2015 Danny - All Rights Reserved
Constance
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since 2001-07-28
Posts 393
Ohio
1 posted 2015-11-19 06:16 PM


Beautifully expressed, Ticklefingers. I so enjoyed this read, especially this-

"felt on the breezes
of breath from her sighing
longings of lovers
left spent in the night"

A stellar joining of words!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2015-11-19 06:27 PM


"her shining lips
now speak of her passion"

Yep. Uh huh. The poem was a beaut, Ticklefingers. The above two line spoke volumes . . .

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana
3 posted 2015-11-20 02:33 AM


Thank you so much Miss Constance and JerryPat for your kind, complimentary replies.


88's friends

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2015-11-20 05:42 AM


Tf,
This was a delightful sensory experience. Enjoyed your format here. ~L

Pete_W
Member
Posts 185
Scotland (UK)
5 posted 2015-11-20 02:45 PM


enjoyed reading this and had to smile when I got to the last two lines,"I couldn't be mistaken even in this light".
Thanks
Pete

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
6 posted 2015-11-22 07:15 AM


so soft a sound
from each rising tide
skimming a stone
over waters of wishes


Enticing words, Ticklefingers.

I very much love the delicacy of your "Sifting through senses", though the passion is tangible.

Margherita

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA
7 posted 2015-11-22 05:57 PM


Tf, A very sensual write,
flowed down the page beautifully.

rainyday J

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line
8 posted 2015-11-23 05:44 PM


"love lasting longer
than money could buy"

Classic lines. Falling in love has been a lifelong hobby of mine. I have been fortunate enough to afford it, and stealthy enough to survive it.

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana
9 posted 2015-11-23 07:25 PM


Thanks so much for the fine compliments everyone! Greatly appreciated!


88's all

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
10 posted 2015-11-24 10:24 PM


Wonderful piece.


j.

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