Open Poetry #49 |
Sifting Through Senses |
Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
pale blue rippling over black satin linens so soft a sound from each rising tide skimming a stone over waters of wishes I couldn't be mistaken even in this life thoughts bearing visions pretending deceptions love lasting longer than money could buy a promise of virtues left unattended I couldn't be mistaken even in this life felt on the breezes of breath from her sighing longings of lovers left spent in the night her shining lips now speak of her passion I couldn't be mistaken even in this light She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Beautifully expressed, Ticklefingers. I so enjoyed this read, especially this- "felt on the breezes of breath from her sighing longings of lovers left spent in the night" A stellar joining of words! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"her shining lips now speak of her passion" Yep. Uh huh. The poem was a beaut, Ticklefingers. The above two line spoke volumes . . . ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Thank you so much Miss Constance and JerryPat for your kind, complimentary replies. 88's friends She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Tf, This was a delightful sensory experience. Enjoyed your format here. ~L |
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Pete_W Member Posts 185 Scotland (UK) |
enjoyed reading this and had to smile when I got to the last two lines,"I couldn't be mistaken even in this light". Thanks Pete |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
so soft a sound from each rising tide skimming a stone over waters of wishes Enticing words, Ticklefingers. I very much love the delicacy of your "Sifting through senses", though the passion is tangible. Margherita |
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rainyday Member Posts 304 Heartland USA |
Tf, A very sensual write, flowed down the page beautifully. rainyday J |
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Mr Martini Member Posts 366 Beneath The Line |
"love lasting longer than money could buy" Classic lines. Falling in love has been a lifelong hobby of mine. I have been fortunate enough to afford it, and stealthy enough to survive it. Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me! |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Thanks so much for the fine compliments everyone! Greatly appreciated! 88's all She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful piece. j. |
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