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shalisadefa
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since 2009-08-13
Posts 114


0 posted 2015-11-14 05:30 AM


One day I will tell you
about an old river
streaming over the rocky bottom of the river bed
providing the solvent of life
by cutting her own banks, occasionally overflowing.
I will tell you of her clear waters
which made face reflect face.

One day I will tell you
about this pool of wisdom
running wild in some unexpected turns
testing her full measure
meandering through, continuously flowing
I will tell you although not always visible for others,
this river ran deep.

One day I will tell you
about this ancient force of nature
rushing towards the ocean, unaware of her strength
quenching everyone’s thirst,
sharing her soul, as her tides came and went.
One day I will tell you
about this life force
that entered our lives
as ‘the little old wise one’.

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2015-11-14 09:52 AM


quote:
One day I will tell you
about this pool of wisdom
running wild in some unexpected turns
testing her full measure


Exquisite, dear Mira! I am glad you found your way back to Pip.

"Little old wise one" indeed runs deep ...

Love,
Margherita

Constance
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since 2001-07-28
Posts 393
Ohio
2 posted 2015-11-14 03:34 PM


I really like the Chanting quality about this piece. It makes me think of the spoken word of tribal lore. I especially love this line, "providing the solvent of life
by cutting her own banks". Very nice.

smiles,
Constance

jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2015-11-14 08:04 PM


you have given a river a face with the title "wise old one", ..I can even picture myself sitting on its banks listening to the wisdom it speaks to me..lovely write.
rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
4 posted 2015-11-15 06:28 PM


shalisadefa, You made me feel as if this
river were an old friend, a fine write.

rainyday J

Namyh
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since 2009-01-20
Posts 988

5 posted 2015-11-16 03:02 PM


Shalisadefa - I remember a river like that in my home town as probably most of us can. It seemed to carry secrets in its stream. Nice work Shalisadefa. Namyh
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2015-11-16 08:56 PM


this is fun to read...james
shalisadefa
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since 2009-08-13
Posts 114

7 posted 2015-11-19 08:26 PM


This poem is so personal that I never really expected anyone to comment, but you did. Thank you. A special thanks to Margherita for welcoming me back. I remember that you were also welcoming me my first time posting in Pip back in 2009. I appreciate it.
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