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Open Poetry #49

Smoke to an Empty Sky

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2015-11-06 06:37 AM

Smoke to an Empty Sky

All the rainbow leaves
have fallen in the restless
winds of Autumn passing.
This Winter world of
relentless sorrows,
infinite longings, and
fading memories,
now lies without color
  or purpose,
for the path to her heart
has closed and love has
  vanished
as smoke to an empty
  sky.

          --- b. e. adams [11/6/2015]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2015-11-06 10:30 AM

Bruce
This poem is so forlorn. Makes me think of a lone bare tree in winter shuddering in the wind. ~L

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2015-11-06 01:34 PM

I was thinking of just such a tree when I wrote it ... you are very perceptive !

like this Zenoid:

Winter morning
dead tree,
live tree
who can tell?

--- b. e. adams

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2015-11-07 08:55 PM

nice writing...james

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2015-11-07 09:17 PM

Thanks JM!

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

5 posted 2015-11-13 12:26 PM

I loved everything about this Poem,
from the title to the very haunting & beautiful
close.

Enjoyed..
rainyday J

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

6 posted 2015-11-15 09:05 AM

There is no beautiful season if a heart is heavy with loss. Beautiful poem.

Smiles,
Constance

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