Closing the book of counted sorrows

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Open Poetry #49

Closing the book of counted sorrows

shalisadefa
Member

since 2009-08-13

Posts 114

0 posted 2015-10-10 12:34 PM

Closing the book

Once a writer
made up a source
a book of counted sorrows
in retrospect I did the same
of a life that was not ours

Reading back
the plot was weak
although a lot at stake
endless repeats of same old same old
a flop was in the make

It was my book of make believe
of things not meant to be
of dreams of hopes
of wishing on
but no quotes of reality

If I someday
get a chance to write
of happiness hope and love
my characters will be real and strong
fearless of love and fight

My book of counted sorrows has closed
I bid you farewell my friend
here’s to you
don’t ever forget
my love will never end

Mira

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-10-10 01:00 PM

Such a story.

Sad in its reflections with a hint of joy in what once was. Keeping the 'book' rather than discarding it speaks of sorrows born of love.

Wonderful title, beautifully crafted poetry.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2015-10-10 04:46 PM

I remember that book of counted sorrows. Life gets in the way of life sometimes. Godspeed.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2015-10-10 04:52 PM

"If I someday
get a chance to write
of happiness hope and love
my characters will be real and strong
fearless of  love and fight"

Amen to that!  I think we all have a few chapters at least that we would love the chance to rewrite... but longing for that rewrite is another sorrow in itself.  You have it write in looking to just write fresh.

Loved this piece.  Could feel every trace of emotion behind it.

Michael

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2015-10-10 05:33 PM

Beautiful...you have already begun...james

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