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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2015-09-01 06:36 PM


once,
a long time ago,
I watched
my first Rose strip
away her petals
until she was unprotected
only for me
it all happened
in time-lapse surroundings

all these years since
I've solicited
my untried gods
that another Rose might come to bud

my untried gods are smiling

©June 23, 2015 / Jerry Pat Bolton


~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

© Copyright 2015 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
jjote
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since 2002-12-25
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1 posted 2015-09-01 09:20 PM


patience man, she may just be around the corner waiting...
JerryPat2
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2 posted 2015-09-01 09:28 PM


When I said, in the last line of the poem, "my untried gods are smiling," I meant that she had come to me. Thank you, jjote.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

jjote
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3 posted 2015-09-01 11:18 PM


OOPS..missed that..good for you.
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2015-09-02 06:42 AM


I like your word play here, my friend. I like your subtle implications. ~L
JerryPat2
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5 posted 2015-09-02 10:13 AM


Good day Lori, and thank you muchly . . .

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

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