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Something on your mind
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Something on your mind |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada 
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You caught me casting my eyes on you above the gaps of heads clustering inside a subway train, packed tight against each other, absorbed in their own thoughts perhaps envisioning their day ahead. I wonder if I will ever catch you again also casting your eyes on me - strangers in this moment in time thrown together, fragments of life standing still while the train moves on to get to our stops. If I had a surplus of optimism, I would ask myself Is something on your mind, that you could throw your gaze on me with such disquieting intensity? But optimism is a kind of wine - it trumps sense, makes one imagine a wish-granting gem as real. The train stops - in the rush of people getting off we lose sight of each other - but maybe when our worlds collided in an infinitesimal flash of time, we joined the knights of old seeking the grail, the hunt as enticing as tilting at windmills. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . You brought back the subways of New York. This was back in the seventies and I'm fresh out of Hicksville, Arkansas. I had to catch the subway to work and back home. Was this old country boy surprised when a woman I was standing behind on a crowded subway reached behind her to . . . er . . . find me. I quickly found out that a crowded subway was a better "pick-up" place than the local watering hole. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Maybe I spoke too soon and too vocal . . . Sorry if that is the case. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
nice Josefina, enjoyed. and Jerry, I think you just told a memory~nothing wrong in that.Jo |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
didn't see anything out of place in your response Jerry. Fact of life, life aboard subway trains, etc..who knows how many chance encounters happen there...  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...james |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sometimes "the eyes upon you" and that unique feeling it gives, turns out to be all there was to be had from that person anyway. Or worse yet, a larger dose could have been fatal. That special moment wasn't about what could have been. It is a special moment because how it makes you feel, even now, when you remember... ~L |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Adrenaline in full-swing here, poetess! "But optimism is a kind of wine - it trumps sense, makes one imagine a wish-granting gem as real." ~great bit of flavored wisdom, enjoyed much curtsies, ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ah, fleeting pangs of love so often felt, and yet so momentarily, an attachment that fails to lock . . . often I've wondered is such things stem from past lives . . . well written, my friend. j. |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
I appreciate all your comments, makes it all worthwhile to put in my 2cents worth of "poems"..hugs everyone |
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