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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2015-05-08 08:38 AM


Everyone has bad days and my thoughts were not my friend the day I wrote this . . .


My shed tears are like the quiet drift
Of petals from some magic rose;
And all my grief flows from the rift
Of unremembered skies and snows.

I think, that if I touched the earth,
Shoved my hand in some nearby stream,
It would crumble; losing its worth.
These thoughts conjured up, like a dream.

©May 6, 2015  / Jerry Pat Bolton



~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

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devina
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1 posted 2015-05-08 10:43 AM


Know what I hear?...mystic poetry at its finest, Jerry! Hugs to you fer that bad day...but I can feel the foggy tendrils of a strong-willed heart clinging in solace to all the Mother's elements...

One of my very fav's from you so far!
G'mornin  
~T


Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



EmmaRose
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2 posted 2015-05-08 10:57 AM


Just watching those pink petals flying around around skybound, then falling on the ground as I read this, very strong and deep yet tender
JerryPat2
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3 posted 2015-05-08 11:01 AM



Awww . . . Thank you so much, Tanya, for your very kind comments. Yes, I have distanced myself from where I was when that poem was written (yesterday).

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JerryPat2
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4 posted 2015-05-08 11:02 AM


You are so good at picking up on nuances, Emma. Thank you.

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Michael
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5 posted 2015-05-08 06:29 PM


Not sure if you were referring to a sleeping dream, or a wishing type one, here.  Felt like s  a sleep one anyway.  Some of my darkest poetry has come from sleep dreams and not being able to shake the feeling once awake.  I really liked this one.  When dark suits you, it does so quite well.

Michael

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2015-05-08 06:58 PM


Yep, it was a dream Michael, and a lot scarier than what I projected here. Appreciate your thoughts.

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