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Thought I'd Tried |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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That rainbow burnt before my eyes- my "never-walk" wears no disguise. I lie in wait- strength gone below, cant see too far- past that rainbow. The stars stay safe just out of sight- (no virgin winks at me) These empty walls may just be right- and darkness eats and eats. Trapped am I, still no disguise a whisper and a plea. I siphon Hope from those I love (won't bother mine- she's up and died) Belittle me, I do each day- refuse to gaze at my own face. For most of me, is crumbled throne was always soft, yet hard as stone. My never-walk dances tonight- upon a shell I'd once called home. Laughter bubbles in minds' eye- I hiccup once, eyes long past dried. Save myself? I thought I'd tried. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (04-17-2015 04:51 AM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I siphon Hope from those I love That's what they're there for... to sustain you until you can stand again. Painful and poignant write! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Read your poem three times, loving it more each time. Powerful writing, Lady! Misc |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You wear your darkness beautifully, T. Love the "never-walk" aspect you create here. Often we are victims of our own unwillingness to move forward from a bad situation till everything we were striving to hold onto has crumbled around us where awaking to nothing we still refuse to move. You're writing has grown so much. A pleasure to read. Michael |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Powerful, my friend, well phrased - very Michael-est, and that's not a bad thing... and for the 2nd time tonight, I'm going to let southern's comment speak for me . . . (beginning to worry about how she knows what I'm thinking...) enjoyed j. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Nice! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
devina, I like your way with words in the dark! I'm with the rest of the gang here on the commentary! Stroke, stroke... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*warm fuzzies here*... thank you all for the sweet replies, the read, and your insight! much lovz ~d Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very moving devina. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Kickass poetry, devina, you assembled all the words and arranged them superbly. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Just wonderful poetic relanguaging. I found it deeply engrossing but simply resolving. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"Open arms can be the most fragile in the world" Only when they are empty. Once filled with some one, child or adult they are very strong indeed. Very good writing and thoughts ditto Michael Suthern and others. Jo Perry |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Ida- ty so much for the read lady! Jerry- lmao...you have me grinnin for sure mister...deepest thanks to you  Eric- ty for the dub..."poetic relanguaging"...been lookin for a strong wordset...and i like it sweetie! latearrival- much obliged fer the read & my signature! I was 19 when i joined, tho happy-settled now, i don't have the heart to replace it. take care! ~d Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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