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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Moments like tangles Spin out in a web Shiny white-sticky On branches long dead Withered and lonely I reach soft for one- to dangle on fingertip... I crack and succumb. Striking Moistened light wrapped in thin strand. Shaking- It's too bright I fist-close my hand. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This piece pulls in more than one direction for me... I read it like a child reaching for the unknown and ultimately upsetting his/her balance. Even as adults, we often revisit those thoughts |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
There is so much to read into this. I like the shiny moments being something one could reach for, though certainly can relate to the closing fist at the end signifying that the time for reaching has passed. Good to see you here, btw. How you getting along up there? Michael |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
hard to open that door when there's a guard posted outside......it's bright out there!! excellent work. true love never looks after it's own interests |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Rex! Thank you fer stoppin' in hun & yeppers...those reeeevisits...sigh*  Your take on this one, a poem in itself! take care!Michael! Hey You, good to know you're still about and writing...Me? the short story IS a long one. i'd hafta say i am grins and blah i think?? Ty fer the read  ethome- well how r u?! The guard? so true, I'm my own worst enemy most days.lol TY much! |
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WindWalker12 Member
since 2009-10-17
Posts 57 |
This is excellent work!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sweetest thanx fer the pop-in and read! be well ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
love those "Moments like tangles Spin(ning) out in a web" and that "moistened light" ! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Warm thanx for your sweet comment take care! ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Come into my web said the spider to the maiden, NO NO said those many who have reached too far. Sometimes it is fun to venture forth but then our inner soul pulls the string. Enjoying your mind put to type. Jo |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Jo- I *adore your silent tip-toes, and this time you bring spiders and maiden? What girl doesn't love a friend like that?!  I always look forward to your lovely comments! Thanks, you.. ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, And I cannot, cannot go.." ~Emily Bronte 'The Night is Darkening Around Me' |
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