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thimothi
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0 posted 2015-03-22 01:34 PM



You bid me Good Bye
And walked away..
Leaving me behind.....
I couldn't utter a word.....
All i could do was
To shed some tears..
Each drop yelled
"Never leave me alone"
Drops were fleeting
But not my yelling..
For it still continues......

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Vincent
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1 posted 2015-03-22 01:40 PM


sometimes inside says what we can`t, what we wished we had.  short and to the point, my kind of read. good work.
JerryPat2
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2 posted 2015-03-22 02:00 PM


Welcome to PiP, thimothi . . . Your first poem I liked very much. Yes . . . Even when the teardrops stop falling, the yelling can, and sometimes does, keeps on keeping on.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2015-03-22 03:15 PM


I like this very much as well! The ending has a haunting to it. Well done! ~L
Sunshine
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4 posted 2015-04-10 09:44 AM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry! Please check your email for a Very Special Welcome!

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Rex Allen McCoy
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5 posted 2015-04-10 10:15 AM


The pile of ash where your heart used to be will continue to smolder until a new seed is planted in its sted... Then, wonderful experiences begin to grow once more.

Welcome to Passions

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2015-04-11 08:47 PM


nice writing about only having control over our own choices...james
ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2015-04-12 08:31 AM


very interesting way to look at it. the power of those tears is multidirectional.
jwesley
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Spring, Texas
8 posted 2015-05-21 09:04 PM


Being "left" is always tough, my friend . . . but think positive . . . think of the world to come... and it will,


j.

2islander2
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9 posted 2015-05-23 12:40 PM


very nice feelings, loved it


yann



devina
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Cali
10 posted 2015-05-25 08:46 PM


This leave quite the echo m'friend, well done

"..But a tyrant spell has bound me,
And I cannot, cannot go.."
~Emily Bronte
'The Night is Darkening Around Me'

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2015-06-16 10:56 PM


rejection is a hard animal to face...james
thimothi
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india
12 posted 2017-04-18 01:22 PM


thanks a lot
CocoBaci
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13 posted 2019-03-24 04:03 PM


Hi Timothi, enjoyed this read Thanks so much for sharing.
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