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RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 772
uk

0 posted 2015-03-01 03:54 AM



When we have succumb to the passage of time,
and nodding in our weary heads-- take heed,
and rest upon my breast, for even though we
would be grey and old, alas my heart would beat
the same.

Yes, I know the future has not been laid beneath our
feet’ for we have yet to place it.
And slowly in my hands do I have the abilities to stir
what we grow, and change, and crumble, for we all crumble
under the pressures of an existence uncertain.

i’ve already laid down the payments to rebuild
what shall fall, the payment paid in full.

It is easy to lie’ and say I love thee so,
it is also easy to die’ without an answer to the whole,
but I need neither both to condense my feelings
into the form of meaning.

I gather these thoughts as if I knew them
from a time long ago, before I was what you
see before me, what is this meaning of love?
i’m not fond of a single word-- because I am more
than metaphor, more than that taming of the heart
by words along of promises and dreams.

I feel lost within meaning.

And ye ask me be I man, or boy, or soul.
I do not know neither or either or just--
what it is that any relation is to the form of
connection to an experience outside of the body
in the form of a word, but I will say this to the
question, I am the one who stays.


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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2015-03-01 08:22 AM


I like this. I like the way you took the broadness of a thought and distilled it into the completeness of your last line. ~L
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2015-03-01 10:17 AM


You touched upon reincarnation in the fifth verse, and I have come to believe in it, better that than the fairy tale i was brought up to believe in. I absolutely love this . . .
quote:

It is easy to lie’ and say I love thee so,
it is also easy to die’ without an answer to the whole,


~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
3 posted 2015-03-01 06:30 PM


I like this one.  Especially, 'I feel lost within meaning' -- a great line in exactly the right place.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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